Review Detail of Hayato_Shinohara in Unrivaled System
Review detail
I don't know why this book has so many views and powerstones. I read through the prologue and cringed multiple times from the poor writing quality, lack of story development and just how generic and pushed over it feels. Sure, it can come across as a decent story but the way it's being written and executed is just unbearable to me. I decided to leave an honest review since most of them consist of nonsensical spam from questionable users.
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The review section isn’t to praise the author, but to grade the story and give criticism, good and/or bad. And this story is far from perfect.
WormDragon:If you read it and don`t really like it, just leave, why bother creating a dirt just to throw it to the author... why can`t you just appreciate it ?... go create your own then tell me if it isn`t hard to create one..
The other user summed it up for me. And in case you were wondering, yes, I do write myself. Do give my work a look if you want to see how I write.
WormDragon:If you read it and don`t really like it, just leave, why bother creating a dirt just to throw it to the author... why can`t you just appreciate it ?... go create your own then tell me if it isn`t hard to create one..
Yea they most definitely are a virgin with that mindset like wtf there are few virgins on the women side it doesn't make them sl*ts it makes them a normal person
Kenrayoi:Its pretty rare to find virgin girls in this generation
Fallout_Armageddon:Yea they most definitely are a virgin with that mindset like wtf there are few virgins on the women side it doesn't make them sl*ts it makes them a normal person
Sorry miss if it hurt ur feelings i did not mean to convey a message that is sexist what i mean is people too free today that most teens already having sex when they are in middle school atleast in my country that is so sorry if this offended anyone and plss forgive me for my rudeness
Fallout_Armageddon:Yea they most definitely are a virgin with that mindset like wtf there are few virgins on the women side it doesn't make them sl*ts it makes them a normal person
Kenrayoi:Sorry miss if it hurt ur feelings i did not mean to convey a message that is sexist what i mean is people too free today that most teens already having sex when they are in middle school atleast in my country that is so sorry if this offended anyone and plss forgive me for my rudeness
Kenrayoi:Sorry miss if it hurt ur feelings i did not mean to convey a message that is sexist what i mean is people too free today that most teens already having sex when they are in middle school atleast in my country that is so sorry if this offended anyone and plss forgive me for my rudeness
What i mean is that the teens this days are free and curious so because of puberty thier libido goes up and they have sex and thats most girls i know from exp im a **** too
Fallout_Armageddon:Dude I'm make and I have no idea what you're on about
Kenrayoi:What i mean is that the teens this days are free and curious so because of puberty thier libido goes up and they have sex and thats most girls i know from exp im a **** too
Yeah, your right about that. I'm still a virigin I'm like still 14, you know. Well, on how I portray the story is not like what that guy said above, saying that a girl is not a virgin, they are slut. Most of the Characters are virign because in my own perspective it just feels weird having married someone who already got ****ed by others, that guy may very well said 'Oh! That guy's wife? I have already seen and tasted every inch of her body' And so who wouldn't feel weird about that. But I'm okay having girlfriends not being a virgin as long as in the long way you won't marry her. In this story I was thinking about marriage up ahead so I let them be a virgin
Kenrayoi:What i mean is that the teens this days are free and curious so because of puberty thier libido goes up and they have sex and thats most girls i know from exp im a **** too
Yeah, your right about that. I'm still a virigin I'm like still 14, you know. Well, on how I portray the story is not like what that guy said above, saying that a girl is not a virgin, they are slut. Most of the Characters are virign because in my own perspective it just feels weird having married someone who already got ****ed by others, that guy may very well said 'Oh! That guy's wife? I have already seen and tasted every inch of her body' And so who wouldn't feel weird about that. But I'm okay having girlfriends not being a virgin as long as in the long way you won't marry her. In this story I was thinking about marriage up ahead so I let them be a virgin
Kenrayoi:What i mean is that the teens this days are free and curious so because of puberty thier libido goes up and they have sex and thats most girls i know from exp im a **** too
Man I felt the same as you before, but then I just skipped through the prologue and I'm glad I did. If the prologue was a 5/100 then chapter 1 and the early chapters was like 55/100, then on it became a 75/100. So it is actually good you just didn't give it a fair chance. Honestly though even once you hit Chapter 1 there is a dramatic rise in quality. Don't knock it until you actually try it.
khaosspawn:The writing quality is constantly improving as the story progresses, and it is very obvious that the author is working hard on improving himself as he is trying to correct his past mistakes.
Creo estar completamente seguro de una cosa y es que todo lector profesional algún día se convierte en escritor. Y en mi humilde opinión personal, no creo que una novela pueda ser criticada por la escritura y faltas ortográficas, porque eso puede mejorarse fácilmente en el futuro. Lo único considerado difícil, es eliminar la pereza con la que un escritor primerizo entra en contacto al iniciar. En fin, mi intención es transmitir que, criticar a alguien que se esfuerza por escribir sus fantasías en una novela, es muestra de inferioridad. ¡Adiós!
WormDragon:If you read it and don`t really like it, just leave, why bother creating a dirt just to throw it to the author... why can`t you just appreciate it ?... go create your own then tell me if it isn`t hard to create one..
