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PieceofSh1tApp
PieceofSh1tAppLv45yr
2020-01-03 14:27

This is going extremely fast and it's not doing a good job of immersion with how fast thing happen, two chapters in and he's already killed three gangs, got the attention of batman and bought a house with 250k that he stole of a gang and then hypnotized and bank clerck. I get that he fused memories with kakashi but how is he killing an eating people like churros? The interactions between Carnage and him are also bland. Either way even if you're doing this for fun and don't care about getting better, at least don't rush things like these. Small stuff matters. Hope you get better.

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DamianSegorski
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Yeah my bad I'll slow it down a bit for now I was trying to get some things set up so i can slow it down.

DamianSegorski
DamianSegorskiAuthor

Yeah my bad I'll slow it down a bit for now I was trying to get some things set up so i can slow it down.

DamianSegorski
DamianSegorskiAuthor

Also I'll work on dialogue a bit better I'll research his personality and if thats all you should enjoy later chapters it'll slow down a bit and I'll entroduce some characters.

DamianSegorski
DamianSegorskiAuthor

Yeah I'll fix that he'll leave some bodies and will only eat a few from each gang

PieceofSh1tApp
PieceofSh1tAppLv4

Looking forward to it then :D

DamianSegorski:Also I'll work on dialogue a bit better I'll research his personality and if thats all you should enjoy later chapters it'll slow down a bit and I'll entroduce some characters.
DamianSegorski
DamianSegorskiAuthor

Thanks also in the anouncement I mentioned the fixes I just did im hoping its a bit better the diolaugue will just be better in future.I hope that will be good for now the last guaranteed chapter for today will have some improved diolaugue.

PieceofSh1tApp:Looking forward to it then :D
Kurosis
KurosisLv4

what?!?!? an author that actually uses advice and doesn't just listen 0.0 shocking haha well gone author and just for that ill read ur story but i won't post a review till u reach chapter 30 cause too many drop by then

DamianSegorski:Thanks also in the anouncement I mentioned the fixes I just did im hoping its a bit better the diolaugue will just be better in future.I hope that will be good for now the last guaranteed chapter for today will have some improved diolaugue.
DamianSegorski
DamianSegorskiAuthor

Yeah i know anyways I'm about to post my discord so some people can talk to me easiee if they have it which is btw Q57bch7.

Kurosis:what?!?!? an author that actually uses advice and doesn't just listen 0.0 shocking haha well gone author and just for that ill read ur story but i won't post a review till u reach chapter 30 cause too many drop by then
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