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Democratis
DemocratisLv115yr
2020-02-20 03:01

I had high hopes for this story - but my disappointment is immeasurable and my day is ruined. Lets start off by saying the MC has the IQ of a Gecko, however the Gecko probably beats him in common sense. The story is basically a copy of Reincarnated into Dragon Egg but just with a DxD background - there is very little originality in the story and what is original generally makes you want to rip out your own spine due to frequent paradoxes and lack of logic. The only good things so far, is the premise and the quantity of released chapter. Read at your own risk.

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GreatSage_Master1
GreatSage_Master1Author

I think that it is not fair to say that the story is a copy of Reincarnated into a Dragon Egg with DxD background, since I have made notables changes in the start and it is only the first 12-15 chapters of 55 (right now).

Democratis
DemocratisLv11

My guy, the only notable changes in what I have read so far is just adding the DxD world. You may very well have changed it later on, but the introduction and up to chapter 20 is like a student copy and pasting information onto an essay and then changing all the words to synonyms. Additionally, I HIGHLY suggest you use grammarly as there are many typos and spelling mistakes that further lower the quality. Just from the amount of chapters I can see you are trying - but if you want to make a good fanfic you need quality not just quanitity.

GreatSage_Master1:I think that it is not fair to say that the story is a copy of Reincarnated into a Dragon Egg with DxD background, since I have made notables changes in the start and it is only the first 12-15 chapters of 55 (right now).
GreatSage_Master1
GreatSage_Master1Author

I use Grammarly, if I have spelling mistakes is not my fault (it is, I know. But I have confidence on Grammarly.)

Democratis:My guy, the only notable changes in what I have read so far is just adding the DxD world. You may very well have changed it later on, but the introduction and up to chapter 20 is like a student copy and pasting information onto an essay and then changing all the words to synonyms. Additionally, I HIGHLY suggest you use grammarly as there are many typos and spelling mistakes that further lower the quality. Just from the amount of chapters I can see you are trying - but if you want to make a good fanfic you need quality not just quanitity.
CantWrite
CantWriteLv13

But Grammarly doesn’t fix pronouns such he, she, him, and her. U should really fix those mistakes since people literally point them out to u in chapter/paragraph comments.

GreatSage_Master1:I use Grammarly, if I have spelling mistakes is not my fault (it is, I know. But I have confidence on Grammarly.)
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Legendary_Person
Legendary_PersonLv5

I have to say, I have been reading a few reviews on this novel and to say I am not disappointed would be a huge understatement. Sure, the first few chapters were totally unbearable with Mc's perversive personality and dumbness, the story itself took a turn for the better. Our Mc seems to have grown up, he acts and behaves like a proper and mature person, he is rational and cold about situations and doesn't give in to emotions very easily which is a good thing. Surely the biggest improvement has been his behavior around the opposite gender, in the first few chapters, his personality was just like a horny dog and nothing more. It really was unbearable and made my want to drop the novel but I didn't and continue to read it to this day. The reviews state the truth but they aren't up-to-date, this story has progressed a lot since the start and the author's style of writing has also seemed to mature quite a lot. The character description of Azazel is also spot-on and interesting, the direction of the story is also interesting so is the upcoming Holy-grail arc. I personally would like people to once again read this novel and update their reviews, it doesn't give a good impression to readers who only read the bad beginning and drop the story. The author-san can maybe edit those chapters and also delete those reviews after asking the readers to post a much-updated review. This novel has the potential to be a 4.5 or 4.6-star novel, it is very well written and designed. I hope people do update their review after reading my post. Thank you for your time guys..... Stay safe and stay inside.... Diseda~....

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