Minimal typos, fairly decent read, but it ain't for me due to disagreeance with certain aspects of the story later on. 82 chapters in and there ain't much world building, like it was faintly grazed and never to be seen again till a red moon. Character Development was kinda meh in my books, Story Development seems fairly rushed, especially as the amount you can read in an hour is like 20 some chapters. This story ain't for Lore lovers, I'm saddened to say, as it just seems like.... (I'm going to screw up this quote) "going into an apple store, where the only descriptor is the name apple, and no one tells you the price or anything, so you get arrested as you leave the store becausr of theft", it quite literally felt like that for lore. I know it's a modern-esque, but you don't explain ****, like "oh yeah these guys made it".... Or "it runs off of bull****, lets agree to never talk about it again for over 50 chapters" ..... Haaaa my grievances aside, I can look past all that, but I just can't agree with one little thing. And sadly it's a spoiler so I can't say it.... Haaaa fml
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LIKE.... Around chapter 50 is one issue and chapter 82 is where the other issue is. I don't care if there's an irl system, or world merging, I only care for how it's done, and how you did it. It really just seems like a low quality mspaint photoshop job.... That actually sounds more offensive and funny than I was intending.... But seriously, it seems rushed, like you either accidentally deleted your works, wanted to move the story along to the second arc, are too used to wuxia style lengths in chapter but wanted to westernize, or you wanted to move the story along because it seemed like not much was happening, when in reality you just skimmed over many details that could be touched upon better.... This is probably one of my most.... Ambitious(?) reviews..... For such a little reason of a terrible world-merge and apocalyptic world progression.... Heck there was also my complaint of how the mc handled the bbeg, like you can very easily end them, why spare them? The first time I can understand, but the second, you don't even give an internal thoughts or anything, just "I surrender and agree to the revised conditions" .... Haaaaa intellegent mc my ass, she could have crippled them at the very least, but no, notta, nothing, just "and don't come out of your corner or we spank you"...... Haaaaaa.... The 'romance' seems poorly done early on, and tbh I would love to continue reading, but I just can't push myself further for the fact of, I have better usages for my chapter tickets..... Don't get me wrong, you write great scenes, you have a good story, but you have many aspects to improve upon.... For a novel on this site 3.9/5 my honest opinion, it ain't at that 4, but it's getting there. If I were to rate it compaired to other novels I found, I would say about 3.4 starting off, before declining into 3/5 due to how you did things to move along the story
