writing is pretty good for the most part, plenty readable, however occasionally some explanations get somewhat convoluted, but not really a deal breaker. updates arent exactly fast, but writing is difficult so i cant hammer the author for it really. story, honestly it starts out pretty good, till chapter 30-40ish the story is pretty interesting, new things happen, but after that i feel like things starts to get stale pretty quickly, combined with the fact that i feel like the author almost forgot that the game system was a thing between chapter 40-100. theres just a lot of repeat fighting. the power ups feel boring in a way, "i want to see the world in chaos" and he gets time dialation? and then its never brought up again. the cross/church is talked about being something good for like 15 chapters. and its just exp bonus?. ive rambled enough here lets move on. characters. they arent bad per say, just occasionally bipolar. i kind of expect a "reasonable tyrant" type of mc, but he just switches between dumb violence, and stupid sympathy. world background is fine-ish, and is fed pretty dynamically, eg not info dumps. but i still feel like i know nothing. i think alot of this can be attributed to the small scale of the current "world" since its effectively like a 1km radius and its being described almost a bit too much for whats actually there? anyway i ended up putting it on hold at chapter 128, i dont hate the story, it just feel really dull to binge. good luck
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This is a very good review. Very constructive, (y). In my defense, when I started writing, I only got to plot the outline for the first 50 chapters. After that I went blind and, thus, the abomination arc (chaps 50-100.) Thank you for the good review.
I do hope you got atleast something from my excessive rambling. I'll look forward to a more cohesive plot point in the future, godspeed to ya
Arba:This is a very good review. Very constructive, (y). In my defense, when I started writing, I only got to plot the outline for the first 50 chapters. After that I went blind and, thus, the abomination arc (chaps 50-100.) Thank you for the good review.
well, I guess after you go like 150~300 chapter, it will be a good time to rewrite some early chapter and edit them there (at that time you would have better idea for your novel to plan, and also better writing skill), because if not then you will have a hard time getting new reader due to that part of your novel. I guess I will waiting for the rewrite then
Arba:This is a very good review. Very constructive, (y). In my defense, when I started writing, I only got to plot the outline for the first 50 chapters. After that I went blind and, thus, the abomination arc (chaps 50-100.) Thank you for the good review.
Bro your review is quite good :)
