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SexyYoungMaster
SexyYoungMasterLv145yr
2019-10-08 13:01

Love the story so far. Whether it be the writing quality, the pace of the story, and depth of characters, I can it’s very well done. The beginning was a little rushed at some part like the training, but it makes sense because the story really doesn’t even start until the mc is untrapped. Also, the stability is pretty good, one and sometimes even two a day! Again, awesome story and I hope you get the recognition you deserve soon. Please keep updating!

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XbsXbs
XbsXbsLv5

Writing quality?? Oof.

XbsXbs
XbsXbsLv5

Writing quality?? Oof.

Pyrozian
PyrozianLv15

So this review was paid for apparently, or something similar, cause the writing quality is second, maybe third grade level

SexyYoungMaster
SexyYoungMasterLv14

Tf

Pyrozian:So this review was paid for apparently, or something similar, cause the writing quality is second, maybe third grade level
imperialdramon
imperialdramonLv12

Trash lvl

Kelvin_Joshua
Kelvin_JoshuaLv1

Hey

Mannymangos
MannymangosLv6

lol that was clearly a spam review.

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NotYourCat
NotYourCatLv11

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