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2019-10-23 15:38

The concept is great and well fleshed out at the risk of being somewhat... Slow. The amount of prehogwards chapters are numerous, so it was quite refreshing when he finally got there. That said... I felt like I was reading someone's childhood biography till then. I can only hope that the remainder of the hogwarts years will fix that overall impression. The MC is strongly fleshed out with his friends the side characters being fleshed out to the point of your avarage ff character. The result of which is a fic that feels rich in its make and more like a novel. The biggest pet peeve I have with this story is the writing quality. Whilst it is better than most non native English speaking writers, it really should get copy pasted into grammerly before each submission, just to get the worst stuff out. Most common however are words being replaced for the wrong ones which destroy a sentence structure to the point worthy of a puzzle. A trunk becoming a truck is not too bad but when the words that glue the sentence together get replaced by completely random ones, it can lead to some major disorientation and sometimes completely having to ignore a sentence due to its unclear nature. That said I like the storytelling and structure of the story, it also seems to be progressing into more mature waters rather than childhood stuff. I hope it gets updated soon and frequently. Primarily because it's a slow story and those are hard to follow when the time between postings gets too big.

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Leíste hasta que comenzó hogwarts y hiciste una reseña? literalmente fueron solo 11 capítulos, fue una reseña terrible y solo habla de la escritura y no la historia en si. literalmente por las reseñas como esta la gente no puede entender cuales son las cualidades de esta historia

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