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WinnieLePooh
WinnieLePoohLv134yr
2020-11-07 00:31

The writing quality is amazing there are barely grammatical error, however the story plotlines are actual dogshit straight and utter dogshit, I mean the fawley ring has anti-summoning Enchant and an enchanment that makes it so only Fawleys can wear it yet people can just take it off your finger? No that's bullshit I mean there had to be an enchanment that makes it so it can't be taken off other than the wearer. Then the whole war council bullshit, I mean at least try to be secretive you just stay there with a "sly grin" and instantly they know it's you, utter bullshit, if your family had problems with their you don't solve it with petty pranks and bullshit, no you plan and obliterate his reputation, then he gets no allied and is easy pickings. Don't forget the dumbass of an mc basically spent 10 years so by jackshit, I mean when he gets his wand he had to practice wand movements? You'd think he'd do it with a stick it something? And the whole "I want to be an animagi" so he asks Mcgonigal, however she says you can't do it until 5-6th year, yet he talks about ugaudu having 80% of their student being anamagi at 14, holy shit ask your aunt to go teach you, I mean ?? You day these things and don't take advantage of the things your given and your family, it's just fucking stupid tbh.

Rebirth in a Magical World

Jmwells2003
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114 Chs

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DaoistyQNGiX
DaoistyQNGiXLv14

Thank you for this review! That ring thing would irritate me big time lol

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