Review Detail of Flat_Moon in Part-Time Star, Full-Time Dad
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Honest Rating 4. At the time of this review 28 chapters have been written. I'm the author and I truly believe that I've made something special from the new system that took me some time to come with to the streaming experience being shown in word form. Character design and story development are the best I've ever done since I started writing as an author. I think I balanced the dad life and fame life pretty well though this is a review after 28 chapters. Protagonist is a confident, smart, humble but he still has his flaws that will go away as he grows. I lose stars in update stability, pacing and world background which has always been my weakest points Also grammar is a slight problem as I'm kinder dumb. You'll see little mistakes like using the wrong "There" and an odd placement of commas with some other common mistakes. With that being said I think this
Part-Time Star, Full-Time Dad
Flat_Moon
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Vansmoke:im curious about harem part. how many exactly are you planning for it? hopefully it's small one, max 3 or just 2. but then, it's not a harem, just polygamy. it's a spoiler question, but insignificant i think. the focus of your story is about being single dad (as his id name implies), so when i saw harem tag, i became curious and thought it was a contradicting point.
Nope, I used kanji in the original version which caused it to be automatically blacklisted. I had to reupload as I was no longer applicable for the rankings.
newthings:rewrite?
SPOILER: Yes, he will, after all, I did introduce the idea that the Space Ink came from a different universe. The chance that he gains a fire ability from a different universe is possible.
Bakkoy:Will he not get the supernatural later?
Flat_Moon:SPOILER: Yes, he will, after all, I did introduce the idea that the Space Ink came from a different universe. The chance that he gains a fire ability from a different universe is possible.
Flat_Moon:SPOILER: Yes, he will, after all, I did introduce the idea that the Space Ink came from a different universe. The chance that he gains a fire ability from a different universe is possible.
Thesoultaker88:I ahve some questions.. first will eh make a real harem and not like because he has f*cked many woman second will there be drama like one woman does not want harem and so on and 3 and last will mc marry all his harem members or treat them the same
im curious about harem part. how many exactly are you planning for it? hopefully it's small one, max 3 or just 2. but then, it's not a harem, just polygamy. it's a spoiler question, but insignificant i think. the focus of your story is about being single dad (as his id name implies), so when i saw harem tag, i became curious and thought it was a contradicting point.
hey, i've been an avid reader of this the first moment i saw it, however with your resent +18 chapter it took a dive with conflicting personalities and felt rush just to get to the steamy scene. if you want you the next time you write a +18 you can contact me and I can read it first and give you my opinion on it, so maybe you can make any changes you feel before post. I'm a fan of this and I hope it can go long and be fun till the end
