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Vansmoke

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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke4mth
    Commented

    Stick to normal Ig.

    No fuck a mermaid
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    Game of Thrones: Path of the Hungry Bear
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke4mth
    Commented

    It would be more interesting if you put Asafa on Simba's paws instead. This chapter gives the vibe of you replacing Simba's role for your MC. Weakening Simba with such an incident will make Asafa's advantages more prominent for King's position.

    Ch 20 Chapter 20. Stars
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    Lion King: Son of Mufasa
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke6mth
    Replied to JustHavinFunReadin

    Kiba's mom

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    I Am Fugaku Uchiha
    Anime & Comics · stylish_slayer
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke6mth
    Replied to Vansmoke

    Or it's Wanted?

    Ch 125 5.3
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    Terror Infinity: Monster
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke6mth
    Commented

    Does Keanu Reaves have double identities here? An actor and assassin.

    Ch 125 5.3
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    Terror Infinity: Monster
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke6mth
    Commented

    Just a rehashing of the previous chapter but with a different POV, with a bit more detail shown.

    Ch 124 5.2
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    Terror Infinity: Monster
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke6mth
    Replied to Vansmoke

    Haven't read the original series, so Idk what to expect yet.

    Ch 122 4.34
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    Terror Infinity: Monster
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke6mth
    Commented

    Would the further the mission, the higher the world they travel through? Because it is getting more difficult as time goes by, from initial fewer contestants to now numbered 20.

    Ch 122 4.34
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    Terror Infinity: Monster
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke6mth
    Commented

    You could have substituted the dialogue with more reasonable words than just absurdly deleting it altogether. Because it is connected to the next dialogue, we as readers get this lost experience while reading, and it's honestly not helping.

    *Bleep* (For Patron only Experience. #SensoringJustToBeSafe.)
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    Reborn with Steve Stand
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke6mth
    Replied to athass_prkr

    So it is Evil/Manipulative!Dumbledore and other cliche-bashing?

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    Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)
    Book&Literature · athass_prkr
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke7mth
    Replied to BurgerNoTomatoes

    Then it's not biologically similar, because tailed beasts are independent entities with separate chakra (being made of chakra), while the shadows are linked directly with the user. I guess the way they work is comparable with how jinchuriki are made of, it's just the shadows akin to keikkei gekkai right? The user is not summoning a beast here, but using their abilities. I do not follow JJK, so I don't know if what I'm assuming is right.

    Similar to the Tailed Beasts in their Biology so to speak.
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    Jujutsu Reincarnation: Unleashing The Ten Shadows In Naruto
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke7mth
    Replied to stylish_slayer

    Don't tell me he's going to collect all potential female clan heads to seek security, because I see Kushina, Tsume, and Tsunade (after she loses Nawaki and Dan) are available, age-wise. Then it's NTR.

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    I Am Fugaku Uchiha
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke7mth
    Replied to RetMod

    This reminds me of a Chinese novel, about entertainment, but it also wrote about the dark past of Boston's crunch. However, I don't know if those were real events. Not a serial killer like this, but more evil, and yes toward children or their followers.

    In the end, only screams can be heard from the holy man, who is found the next morning buried under a bunch of Bibles.
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    Immortal In Supernatural
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke7mth
    Replied to Vansmoke

    Oh yeah, one's strength also affects the mission grade, despite the total number of participants. The rank of the team might also be one of the factors to consider.

    Ch -1 Team Western Europe (Spoiler)
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke7mth
    Replied to Vansmoke

    Writing comments can't display the spacing hmm..

    Ch -1 Team Western Europe (Spoiler)
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke7mth
    Commented

    I thought you were gonna put members' names per arc plus their status (dead or alive)Naruto Alexander (alive)IntroSarah (alive)IntroThe gay soldier (dead)Intro Etc.But I guess it is too much hassle to go back and check all over again. Or you can just add them to your current list, just update the dead ones. That way I can remember their total count before each mission started and estimate the difficulty level.1-7 easy right?7-15 moderate?15-? Hard?

    Ch -1 Team Western Europe (Spoiler)
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke7mth
    Commented

    Wrong transition.

    All eyes turned towards Harry, who in recent rumours had single-handedly killed a squad of dementors with the disarming charm.
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    Harry Potter: A Certain Ancient Rune Professor of Hogwarts (TL)
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke7mth
    Commented

    Can I have a brief intro for the characters per arc? An auxiliary chapter would be better. So I can check it whenever I forget them.

    Ch 107 4.19
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke7mth
    Commented

    Eh, he can just name it himself without being asked. This conversation is kind of unnecessary tbh.

    "It would be called Tsumukari Muramasa"
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    Naruto : The Demon Swordsman
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  • Vansmoke
    Vansmoke7mth
    Commented

    Named Arthur means a Westerner at least, but called the God with -san. Kind of does not match your character's setting. And being an ex-soldier? Hopefully, he won't act too childish despite being introverted or suddenly changed from your setting without progression.

    " Thankyou very much God San!!"
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    Naruto : The Demon Swordsman
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