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8Eight
8EightLv35yr
2019-09-06 10:39

So let’s review this story, I’ll be honest the story ain’t exactly groundbreaking in any way, however I still do enjoy it a bit. My main problems with the story mostly comes from the lack of editer, I’m not sure if it’s just me, but I feel the stories writing feels incredibly hectic at points, not in a fast paste way, but just jumping really quickly between various actions The characters are shockingly more fleshed out than your typical wuxia novel which is honestly surprising to me so kudos to you on that Game mechanics are iffy at best and awful at worst, I generally dislike the perma death game thing that a few novels have, xp distribution is also a bit questionable. I feel like author could have benefitted from just making it a system novel with a gate system like “super gene” My best suggestion to you author would be find a friend you trust to give an honest opinion and make him proof read it a little bit

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Writing quality is dull and boring. There's unneeded censoring, improper use of pronouns, and unappealing descriptions for skills and ****. Story development is terrible, it's going at a steady pace but the obvious plot armor is too blinding to look at. There is absolutely no balancing and stats along with skills are just randomly slapped down while the author thinks, "No one is going to bother to calculate anything, so it's fine. I'm a genius for making mobs so overpowered that a lot of people are in an endless loop of crippling their accounts." Character design.. Oh man, oh ****... Main character is trash for someone who has 7 years of experience while also running a guild/team/whatever you want to call it. I thought, "C-tier? Must of been really behind." But it's quite obvious that the main character is a fucking retard who made his way from sheer luck. Regarding NPCs and other players, their personality and appeal is just as worse as the main character; they're just really stale fluff to add onto the MC's sub-par design. World background. Almost non-existent. Locations names are just dropped down in text, there is no descriptions to build up on the scenery. "It's a cave. It's a forest. It's a road. It's a village." I wouldn't care if the main character was absolute trash if there was an actual world out there and not some **** that was thrown down on the spot without any details. Final verdict - Not even worth to read as a throwaway. And why the **** are you putting so much time into explaining the benefits of the beta when he's going to lose everything when the game officially launches? Please improve the world development, a story isn't a story without an actual world to it.

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