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Aeternabilis
AeternabilisLv144yr
2020-07-25 09:19

Okay, so there are a couple of things. First, the grammar is terrible, HOWEVER, you do see some improvement in it so hopefully, that continues. Second, for me, the mc is way too young from the title I assumed he would be older compared to the rest of the cast. This would then perfectly fit in with his romance with ur. I mean I kinda want to see the mc x ur as the only pairing. Then he could have ultear as his daughter etc. Only my preference but think it would have fit with the story much more. I mean the only way they can be together is if ur is stuck in the ice shell and doesn't age. However, even with this I still feel the mc is too young for the story idea. If this does turn into a harem, then I will prob drop. For me, there are just way too many harem stories on this site already. Personally, any story that has a harem tag I don't even consider reading it... What I do love about this story is how unique the idea is. I haven't ever read something like this so am looking forward to it. As I said before the only problem (for me) is I feel the mc is way too young. Other than this the story has tons of potential.

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Randomlyrandom
RandomlyrandomLv14

You should probably drop then, the minimum I see happening is an oyakodon. Even if akikan says he wants to try single pairing, I somehow sincerely doubt that happening.

DogeLuvReadin
DogeLuvReadinLv13

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DaoistSenzu
DaoistSenzuLv4

Your reading a Akikan book. Its a harem...

TheLonelyGod
TheLonelyGodLv14

Definetly Harem! you are reading Akikan40, buddy!! I don't mind! as long as they are well made!🤷‍♂️ I always like 2 to 3 women maxed not unlike others where they make 15+ women their harem or evem more! well King Arthur had a Hundred women in real life

777worlds
777worldsLv14

Actually, in some legends king arthur had 3 wives all named Gwenhwyfar so technically not a hundred but certainly more than one.

TheLonelyGod:Definetly Harem! you are reading Akikan40, buddy!! I don't mind! as long as they are well made!🤷‍♂️ I always like 2 to 3 women maxed not unlike others where they make 15+ women their harem or evem more! well King Arthur had a Hundred women in real life
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Benjamin_
Benjamin_Lv10

I only made it to chapter 4 before dropping so I gave world background, and story development 3 stars. I wanted to rate them lower but I can't justify it because I didn't read enough to form an opinion on these 2 criteria. I rated stability of updates as 3 because I can't be bothered checking the chapter list to see how regularly he updates. writing quality is 3 because again I only made it to chapter 4 but I saw fair few grammatical errors. character design is 2 because the mc is 4 yet the author described his penis it was very creepy, not only that but the characters aren't his apart from his mc so none of the design is actually his. Whilst the 1 character we do see is mostly in tune with the Ur we see in fairy tail there are instances where she's not. for example she agrees with the mc that he'd be too perfect if he learnt magic. this isn't something Ur would agree with. Now to the main reasons why I rated this so lowly -the author is creepy and describes 4 year old penises - the mc was a lawyer in his past life but doesn't act like he was one - the mc says cringy **** like how he'll make Ur happy and marry her in 15 years when at no point has Ur shown any interest in him but ofc it'll happen cos author wants it to. this is very creepy. - the mc says dumb**** like he doesn't need to learn magic because he'll be too perfect and how he can live a good life from just plagiaring novels and whatnot (yet it seems he can't even recognise he's in the fairy tail universe) -referring back to the mc being a lawyer in his past life. One would assume he's reasonably smart since he was a lawyer right? Wrong. He sees magic but is still shocked to find out he's not on earth after learning where he is and the year. TLDR: 4 chapters in and the author is being creepy. The mc is saying lame, dumb, and cringy ****. He's not acting his profession but is rather acting like a complete and utter child, rather fitting since he is one but isn't consistent with what the author tells us about the mc. Finally, he's only known Ur for a short amount of time and he's already trying to be a simp.

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