I understand this is the authors first story but some huge problems with it. First problem is reading story is like reading a instruction manual. Very dry and bland. No simalies or metaphors and all told in third person perspective. The author does get better as story goes on but no by much. Second problem is suppose to be meidevil age planet with magic but they the have bunch huge merchant families and trade of almost all resources witch did not happen until renaissance age. Then have all people pretty much serfs paying 80-90% of everything to nobles who rule them with iron first and most land unclaimed with beasts ruling it witch is dark ages before midevil ages. Then they have stuff like salt petter witch did not come until after renaissance since need advance chemistry for it. Biggest problem is the tech he puts out not even 10 chapters in and he already making factories to create modern guns and steam engines. I don't think author realizes that technology is acumlitive. You cannot build a gun without advanced metallurgy, advanced chemistry, boring instruments, rifling, and 30 or 40 other technologies witch they do not have. Like taking stairs up a building you cannot jump from first floor to the 68th floor without going through all floors before it. There is no possible or way that a world that does not even have technological advancements of cross bows is making guns. Even if you know how to would take month to years just to make all the tools and instruments to make the guns. No less the nitter, coal, steel and other techs they would not have. Don't think author even realizes that people did not know how to process coal till beginning of industrial age. You cannot just use coal how is when mined. Even cooking was so much different. There would be next to no way to make most modern dishes back then cause they did not have stoves.
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Hey fix Autocorrect dud lol
Logical, but the reviewer's 'Engrish' is killing me.
He made some mistakes big deal why are you making a big fuss over it
jkz91:Logical, but the reviewer's 'Engrish' is killing me.
Because if your Engrish is like this. No matter how logical you are, half of the impression is **** already. So yea, problem? Bitch. And some mistakes? Really? Go re-read his review. Most of which are repeated mistakes. So it's not "SOME" mistake. Is PLENTY of mistakes, mind you.
TheRoof313:He made some mistakes big deal why are you making a big fuss over it
First of all what’s with the cuss calm down you don’t need to act uncivilized to get your point across and second he made mistakes all right but that doesn’t mean you get to make fun out off him I mean it never happened to that you where typing and it autocorrected your words all what I am saying is that it’s a common thing so don’t make fun out of him
jkz91:Because if your Engrish is like this. No matter how logical you are, half of the impression is **** already. So yea, problem? Bitch. And some mistakes? Really? Go re-read his review. Most of which are repeated mistakes. So it's not "SOME" mistake. Is PLENTY of mistakes, mind you.
Calm down; grammar is not important in a review like this, what is important is to get the message across
jkz91:Because if your Engrish is like this. No matter how logical you are, half of the impression is **** already. So yea, problem? Bitch. And some mistakes? Really? Go re-read his review. Most of which are repeated mistakes. So it's not "SOME" mistake. Is PLENTY of mistakes, mind you.
Yea, if your gonna add tech to the world, just have the system spawn it in if you don't know what your missing or go the Release That Witch route and actually describe how you dealt with not having any tech and the challenges you face trying to acquire it.
Just use magical dwarves to solve your problems. Abra kadbra. They have smart tech. The best idea around.
You would sound more convincing if not for the errors in your comment.
jkz91:Because if your Engrish is like this. No matter how logical you are, half of the impression is **** already. So yea, problem? Bitch. And some mistakes? Really? Go re-read his review. Most of which are repeated mistakes. So it's not "SOME" mistake. Is PLENTY of mistakes, mind you.
Reread your own sh1tty comment before typing out trash; punctuation and grammatical mistakes are everywhere.
jkz91:Because if your Engrish is like this. No matter how logical you are, half of the impression is **** already. So yea, problem? Bitch. And some mistakes? Really? Go re-read his review. Most of which are repeated mistakes. So it's not "SOME" mistake. Is PLENTY of mistakes, mind you.
His comment is logical. And hes not writing an essay *****
GGMissFortune:Reread your own sh1tty comment before typing out trash; punctuation and grammatical mistakes are everywhere.
Look at these dumbasses defending him. Lol. What a joke. Can't even see my sarcasm right there? Brainless? Is it fried? Dumb? Retarded?
GGMissFortune:Reread your own sh1tty comment before typing out trash; punctuation and grammatical mistakes are everywhere.
Ok
he's defending you dumbass
jkz91:Look at these dumbasses defending him. Lol. What a joke. Can't even see my sarcasm right there? Brainless? Is it fried? Dumb? Retarded?
Omg, never in my life have I facepalmed so hard. Your IQ & EQ must be off the chart.
FReeeeeeLightnovel:he's defending you dumbass
How the hell is this premium?
**** wrong comment sorry man
jkz91:Omg, never in my life have I facepalmed so hard. Your IQ & EQ must be off the chart.
He was actually cussing about the reviewer's lacking grammar (which was obviously due to ~autocorrect~), without noticing the errors he made in his comment (grammatically). He got it coming. It was logical alright, but as you said, he was not writing an essay, there's no need to make fun of the reviewer.
encheck:His comment is logical. And hes not writing an essay *****
well, was going to read this novel, but thank for the warning, I like this type of novel, but if it done poorly like that, then I rather not waste so much time (beside I already reading 'Enlightened Empire', which implement better, and without that system cheat at that, although I'm fine with that tropes if done right)
