If I had to be fully honest the first 20 chapters of this novel were great.But then it started to go down hill from there. First point is It was going so well but sadly the author cripple his ability, so now he could only shoot 5 that are guaranteed to go in.but he got it later. I get your trying to get him to realise his aragance and put some drama in the mix.But the drama was too much the mcs personality was absolutley and uterly atrocious. He loves a girl has 2 kids with her.comes back in time cheats with her three times.Takes her virginity,then when he has sex with her and shes resting ontop of him.That stupid charachter ivy starts having sex and he's too f***ing afraid to stop it because he might wake her up.what utter bull*****. And I really started to like the story to but that whole fiasco really dident make any sense .He hasent even gotten his third yet.It would make more sense to have unlocked it then before the crash had happened.but gets it when he randomplays with his brother. Also what was the point in adding aluka in the first place now.so to face slap her in the future to show her what she missed.(wich is exactly what happened.) Then with sandra his past wife.He dident even fight for her to be by his side and let' her be.He should have know what her personality was like and what she went thru yet he knows nothing. But what I can complement is the story settings and how he has risen so far up until now.tho he wasent able save his mother that dident bring him down for long and even motivated him to do the best for his family,and for himself. This is only my view of the story.But for others it may be an amazing story.And I won't argue with you on that.This is just my review of the 50 chapters so far.But don't be discuroged.Not to read it because of this review because you may very well like the story. Tiger out.
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It's my first novel so I honestly winged it I was gonna drop it but ppl told me not to its not too late to fix a couple of things in the future if you have advice I'm all ears for the future content.
If it was me at least since you broke sandra and eazy off they shouldn't meet for about a year or two and while he's of doing better but still thinking about her, she would slip more and more like you described. Thats when she gets in some sort of accident that puts her in the hospital.And mid way a few hours before a major NBA match starts.Hes contacted by sandras,brother or parents about the situation.and that the operation(wicherver injury you chose)Will cost too much for them and ask for help. That's doset matter to him and he pays for everything staying at the hospital she's at.so he's there.And after a successful operation and her finnaly waking up he realizes just how much this girl means to him.He couldn't save his mother,but the woman infront of him he could. And after some time she tells him her feelings and how she was slowly sinking in deep darkness.And like like you said she felt depressed about not being able to satisfy him.she falls even more depressed as she thinks and says he wouldn't want an ugle crippled wife. And listening to the words he would either shout at her to never say that again or laugh then tell her what happened in the past about aluka. And confessing the love he has for her And this time she won't leave him and walk away.Then make a joke about how she couldn't even if she tried. Which got her to laugh and start to cry after a full year of depression will finally be gone and a new bigining for both of them will begin. And please if you do take this suggestion don't have her so that she was with other men.And that he would focused on training.And no time for women either. I'll continue reading to see were this novel goes.I just hope if this novel does have an ending.Its one that not only satisfies the readers but also you author writing it. Tiger out.
MrE:It's my first novel so I honestly winged it I was gonna drop it but ppl told me not to its not too late to fix a couple of things in the future if you have advice I'm all ears for the future content.
Lol it's weird I had honestly planned on doing just that you guys just need to watch and see where this goes
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