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Rairaidani
RairaidaniLv146yr
2018-11-27 21:47

All good except writing skill i think. U just need keep writing and update new chapters as fast as u can馃榿 The plot and concept is classic jap novel? Well old but gold. Its harem? At least make all his woman pure. We dont like our future already used by someone isnt?? And mc already op in there so dont hold back when he do something then do it fast!!

The Locked System

Burst17
4.4
108 Chs

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Burst17
Burst17Author

Well, I'm not going to give myself 5 stars because I'm medium slow writing, also English is not my native language, so I apologize for any writing error

6yr

Unique_Sovereign
Unique_SovereignLv15

Having a mix with an anime and manga system for Hayato along with an original world you came up with your story is great for the setting. Hayato has to rise above his challenges and enemies as he goes through his adventure. Whether they鈥檙e from nobility, criminal, deities, and other anime or manga characters.

6yr
_EMI_
_EMI_Lv4

It's good. I like it and I would recommend it to everyone to read. It need more chapters though. So author, please don't drop this. 1401401041041041041040

6yr
Ghoul1357957913
Ghoul1357957913Lv3

The story is good and you should continue on. But give him even more exciting powers like divine divide, etc and all which will at least give me goosebumps

6yr
Zeferath
ZeferathLv15

I just point in solid caseing love the story it for me has hit a close to heart fantasy nerve and rattled my emotions to read when available.

6yr
leradicateur
leradicateurLv6

really nice to read, waiting for next chapters update. Don't drop it, but don't hurrytake your time to write it!! Sometimes need to be careful, you repeat some of your text

6yr
Brann_Sixxx
Brann_SixxxLv3

I like this i hope the author dont drop this . . B.

6yr
Crayon_Devourer
Crayon_DevourerLv4

Is it finally back? After a year of waiting. The story is great with a few grammatical errors, which an interesting story that differs from common fanfics.

2yr
Slaxkers1
Slaxkers1Lv1

Despite my good rating I do have somethings that I sorta dislike and that is that the MC isn't really getting abilities from other anime worlds like for example he could get the boosted gear and the commandments from Nanatsu no taizai. The other thing is that the MC doesn't really seem to I guess increase in power because he says he's training but he doesn't elaborate on that which I don't like.

5yr
Linkertoon
LinkertoonLv3

El ingles se me da mal para escribir pero thanks for the chapter and the novel I hope you continue the story because it leaves a lot of intrigue

5yr
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