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2022-10-21 09:49

Maiden of the Splitting Moon is a story about Ming Yue, a girl who had her entire village slaughtered by bandits. She became a cultivator afterwards with her divine-tier sword. All in all, a fairly generic story as far as this niche goes. Young girl has village slaughtered by bandits, becomes wandering cultivator, acts cold to other people. In most cases, said girl would also be ruthless, but not in this one. Writing quality is decent. There isn't any obvious mistakes that I can tell, but it isn't anything special either. (4/5 stars) Story development is pretty meh. It's really generic all things considered. Pretty much all encounters are very predictable, and go exactly how you expect them to go. This story brings nothing unique to the already over-saturated genre. Character design is where I'm most annoyed at. This could be considered a problem with both story development and character design, so I'll put it here. The sheer amount of times someone attacks the main character with intent to kill her and she does nothing except threaten them is staggering. This problem hasn't resolved itself even at chapter 100+, and it is super annoying. Aside from that, side characters are really bland. I don't think there is a single distinctive side character in this novel. (2/5 stars) World background is very generic as well. I've seen all of it before. However, as far as other cultivation novels on this site goes it's somewhat in-depth. The only problem is that this world seems very tiny. Three cities, a few villages. What are the odds of constantly meeting the same person over and over again in various places? (3/5 stars) Overall, the story is rather bland, I've read similar stories with a FL like this, and most of them tend to do it better. Compared to the average cultivation story, this is better. I give this story 3.4 stars out of 5.

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Yet another story with plenty of potential ruined by an author who puts barely any effort into their writing. This comes across as a rough draft written by someone with a very poor grasp of English. It has among the worst grammar & spelling I've seen in any web novel. The verb tenses are also all over the place. Even a simple spell check would be a dramatic improvement. The chapters are also very short relative to most stories. The author would do better to put out chapters less frequently and take the time to improve their writing. Even if the spelling and grammar were fixed, the author desperately needs to work on the writing quality. Thoughts and dialogue are not very accurate to how people actually think and talk. The story itself is almost written as if the author was in a hurry to get past that point. I'd suggest the author spend some time reading good quality writing by various authors, consider what makes it good, and attempt to emulate it. The way cultivation works is presented as an info dump that is then largely ignored in favour of the MC being able to easily defeat almost anyone she fights, even if they are more than twice her age with much more experience and a stronger cultivation. She has barely any experience fighting but defeats people who spend their lives fighting. She then gets tips from others to improve her fighting that make it sound as though her ability is closer to what would be expected of someone with so little experience. So how did she defeat her previous opponents? The story makes it clear she's not a genius and has only the most basic resources at her disposal. The only thing she has is a powerful weapon, which shouldn't be enough to bridge the gap. This is one of those stories I hate to put down because the story itself is interesting, but the writing quality is just so bad I can't enjoy it.

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