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ARGAS
ARGASAuthor5yr
2019-07-25 04:19

Hello! I'm the author here giving myself a three because I think that there is fair deal of stuff to improve. I don't intend to get into super exaggerated descriptions like "glorious, glamorous or planet-breaking, etc". Not really of fan of that. If you enjoy the story then please leave a review, if there is any issue such as grammar or plot holes and such, leave a comment and I will try my best to fix it.

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ARGAS
ARGASAuthor

Forgot to add, yes, this is a cultivation story but it's not going to be a huge element.

Redturbans
RedturbansLv4

You should at least give yourself a 4.Your writing has most definitely improved a lot you deserve it really . Keep up the good work :)

Brammm
BrammmLv13

i love your story i think it deserves more then 3 stars i would at least rate it 4,5 stars but probebly 5 stars compared to other storys on this site . as for feedback i think you could add more information about how elemental talent works after 270 chapters in i think i get how it works but i still have doubts over if im correct.

ARGAS
ARGASAuthor

Will take it to note. The early chapters are a bit rough and will be redone later to better introduce the world mechanics. In terms of elemental talent, you could relate it to magic in a sense. You would be super proficient in one element and be able to use just that. But with something like the "Dao" where anything under the sun can be considered, it gets complicated because you could practice another "Dao" to compliment your main. It gets very open-ended which puts me in a love/hate reationship with it. The concept of "Dao" gives a sense that you could do anything but that also means that it can get very complicated.

Brammm:i love your story i think it deserves more then 3 stars i would at least rate it 4,5 stars but probebly 5 stars compared to other storys on this site . as for feedback i think you could add more information about how elemental talent works after 270 chapters in i think i get how it works but i still have doubts over if im correct.
Hastatii
HastatiiLv13

I have a question If it has a no romance tag why does it say fantasy romance in the genre??? I’m confused 🤣

ARGAS
ARGASAuthor

Yeah, unfortunately if you have a female lead, literally all the genre options have romance next to it. They don't have a fantasy only option. Waiting for Webnovel to change that but it doesn't seem like it.

Hastatii:I have a question If it has a no romance tag why does it say fantasy romance in the genre??? I’m confused 🤣
Esha_k
Esha_kLv13

Hii!! I recently found your novel and this is one of the most refreshing stories ever !! Currently obsessed with your book ! Just wanted to ask if you could do a mass relese for the next chapters ?☺️☺️

Hastatii
HastatiiLv13

How sad :(

ARGAS:Yeah, unfortunately if you have a female lead, literally all the genre options have romance next to it. They don't have a fantasy only option. Waiting for Webnovel to change that but it doesn't seem like it.
Raven_Master
Raven_MasterLv14

so no romance????

ARGAS:Yeah, unfortunately if you have a female lead, literally all the genre options have romance next to it. They don't have a fantasy only option. Waiting for Webnovel to change that but it doesn't seem like it.
Abyssally
AbyssallyLv3

No romance, thankfully...

Raven_Master:so no romance????
BlueEyedOracle
BlueEyedOracleLv15

*every

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Shirabe
ShirabeLv5

female protagonist tag??

ARGAS:Yeah, unfortunately if you have a female lead, literally all the genre options have romance next to it. They don't have a fantasy only option. Waiting for Webnovel to change that but it doesn't seem like it.
ARGAS
ARGASAuthor

didn't think about that

Shirabe:female protagonist tag??
Shirabe
ShirabeLv5

ARGAS:didn't think about that
Jaheim_Weeden_4636
Jaheim_Weeden_4636Lv13

I like your story and rate it 4.5. I feel it would be a bit more amazing if you added romance later down the road once she becomes strong enough to not fear losing someone again.

Joshyisboss120
Joshyisboss120Lv14

Hi Argas just wondering if you will add more continents other than the current 3, possibly a island Archipelago, or a lost continent with a mixture of humans, demons, beast people, maybe an angel or celestial species or a elemental species born from different elements. I love the adventure and world building parts, where the world keeps feeling larger and larger. keep up the good work, love the book so far.

ARGAS
ARGASAuthor

maybe :)

Joshyisboss120:Hi Argas just wondering if you will add more continents other than the current 3, possibly a island Archipelago, or a lost continent with a mixture of humans, demons, beast people, maybe an angel or celestial species or a elemental species born from different elements. I love the adventure and world building parts, where the world keeps feeling larger and larger. keep up the good work, love the book so far.
TheNoobGamer_2019
TheNoobGamer_2019Lv12

This story is amazing. First time I’ve paid to read chapters on this site(That means it’s just that good). Keep up the amazing work.

ARGAS
ARGASAuthor

once its finished, yes.

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IntanLestari
IntanLestariLv11

is this transmigration story?

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RikkiU
RikkiULv1

Yet another story with plenty of potential ruined by an author who puts barely any effort into their writing. This comes across as a rough draft written by someone with a very poor grasp of English. It has among the worst grammar & spelling I've seen in any web novel. The verb tenses are also all over the place. Even a simple spell check would be a dramatic improvement. The chapters are also very short relative to most stories. The author would do better to put out chapters less frequently and take the time to improve their writing. Even if the spelling and grammar were fixed, the author desperately needs to work on the writing quality. Thoughts and dialogue are not very accurate to how people actually think and talk. The story itself is almost written as if the author was in a hurry to get past that point. I'd suggest the author spend some time reading good quality writing by various authors, consider what makes it good, and attempt to emulate it. The way cultivation works is presented as an info dump that is then largely ignored in favour of the MC being able to easily defeat almost anyone she fights, even if they are more than twice her age with much more experience and a stronger cultivation. She has barely any experience fighting but defeats people who spend their lives fighting. She then gets tips from others to improve her fighting that make it sound as though her ability is closer to what would be expected of someone with so little experience. So how did she defeat her previous opponents? The story makes it clear she's not a genius and has only the most basic resources at her disposal. The only thing she has is a powerful weapon, which shouldn't be enough to bridge the gap. This is one of those stories I hate to put down because the story itself is interesting, but the writing quality is just so bad I can't enjoy it.

Xyterni
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ayayaya
ayayayaLv15

what this story isn't: it's not a cultivation story about a girl who conquers the heavens with a hidden treasure, system, inheritance or just pure might. it's not a story about a cold beauty that stuns the heart of men like the usual cultivation gal. it's not about a hidden genius that's been suppressed by their family. it's not a story about a genius cultivator that bitch slaps young masters left and right. what this story is: it's about a quiet, determined girl, that was forced out of her home and trains with the sword. it's a very simple premise. it's not as epic as the others you'd usually find. it's not rule breaking. it's not about cheating reincarnated losers or murderous, arrogant geniuses. the girl relies on her own strength. she fights, she kills, she practices the sword. she masters the sword and ascends to the heavens. she doesn't have a corrupt personality or a variety of excuses for horrible actions. she doesn't make stupid decisions like most protags. she doesn't get attacked by everyone she sees, as their world isn't that terrible of a place (after all, people live in it), and she is not forced to fight and protect her treasures every single day. I loved this story and I loved reading it. it's a hidden gem in my opinion. the title is misleading and makes you think about the usual cultivator gal, with a cold personality and a beauty that is constantly described every single page by the author. (doesn't mean she shouldn't be pretty tho) anyways, it's not like that. it's really good and I'd recommend it every day.

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