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Swee2Pea
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2018-10-16 12:58

I love this story already. I like reading about a strong female cultivator all other stories like this are about men cultivating. Please continue writing.

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RikkiU
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Yet another story with plenty of potential ruined by an author who puts barely any effort into their writing. This comes across as a rough draft written by someone with a very poor grasp of English. It has among the worst grammar & spelling I've seen in any web novel. The verb tenses are also all over the place. Even a simple spell check would be a dramatic improvement. The chapters are also very short relative to most stories. The author would do better to put out chapters less frequently and take the time to improve their writing. Even if the spelling and grammar were fixed, the author desperately needs to work on the writing quality. Thoughts and dialogue are not very accurate to how people actually think and talk. The story itself is almost written as if the author was in a hurry to get past that point. I'd suggest the author spend some time reading good quality writing by various authors, consider what makes it good, and attempt to emulate it. The way cultivation works is presented as an info dump that is then largely ignored in favour of the MC being able to easily defeat almost anyone she fights, even if they are more than twice her age with much more experience and a stronger cultivation. She has barely any experience fighting but defeats people who spend their lives fighting. She then gets tips from others to improve her fighting that make it sound as though her ability is closer to what would be expected of someone with so little experience. So how did she defeat her previous opponents? The story makes it clear she's not a genius and has only the most basic resources at her disposal. The only thing she has is a powerful weapon, which shouldn't be enough to bridge the gap. This is one of those stories I hate to put down because the story itself is interesting, but the writing quality is just so bad I can't enjoy it.

Xyterni
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ayayaya
ayayayaLv15

what this story isn't: it's not a cultivation story about a girl who conquers the heavens with a hidden treasure, system, inheritance or just pure might. it's not a story about a cold beauty that stuns the heart of men like the usual cultivation gal. it's not about a hidden genius that's been suppressed by their family. it's not a story about a genius cultivator that bitch slaps young masters left and right. what this story is: it's about a quiet, determined girl, that was forced out of her home and trains with the sword. it's a very simple premise. it's not as epic as the others you'd usually find. it's not rule breaking. it's not about cheating reincarnated losers or murderous, arrogant geniuses. the girl relies on her own strength. she fights, she kills, she practices the sword. she masters the sword and ascends to the heavens. she doesn't have a corrupt personality or a variety of excuses for horrible actions. she doesn't make stupid decisions like most protags. she doesn't get attacked by everyone she sees, as their world isn't that terrible of a place (after all, people live in it), and she is not forced to fight and protect her treasures every single day. I loved this story and I loved reading it. it's a hidden gem in my opinion. the title is misleading and makes you think about the usual cultivator gal, with a cold personality and a beauty that is constantly described every single page by the author. (doesn't mean she shouldn't be pretty tho) anyways, it's not like that. it's really good and I'd recommend it every day.

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