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4uva4elo
4uva4eloLv115yr
2019-08-18 01:29

This is just bad....I honestly dont understand such high rating on this one, it does not make sense at all. I wont describe every little downside and plothole, coz there are too many of them, but: World building is almost nonexisting, especialy in first 80+ chapters, not sure about after that, could not force myself to read, even just for time-killing. Magic system is flawed, and not explained almost at all, the only things said are some particles and imagination. GREAT, that works(no). Power levels are stupid as well, even exalted human mage can apparently view(or feel?) WHOLE kingdom, not even a city, a freaking kingdom! What will happen next? If even at lover level mages can easily use teleportation, at warrior mage, they should be able to destroy the world with the flip of their hand? Characters, their motivations, dialogues, enviroment around MC, everything is extremely DRY! Its like nothing ever happens in this wolrd if our MC is not involved. Surroundings are super dull, author could have mentioned so many things, even just in passing, for example weather, seasons, vendors with some kingdom specialities, festivals, religion, holidays, so many things to make a world more alive and dynamic.....Then again, maybe it is better in later chapters, but so far even characters act like robots, and the only villian in the whole world is the king. King did that, king killed someones father, stole someones girlfriend, etc. I wont even mention MC specificly, coz he acts just like some another mob. 20+ years, still behaves like a newborn. And i dont say that every MC should be fucking OP genius, that knows and can do everything, but at least dont make him that dumb and that unlikable... Oh man...that was quiet a lot....Author, try reading Lord of Mysteries, or some other good fictions, just to see what does GREAT worldbuilding mean, its not only about main story, side quests(as i call them) are super important as well, and if they have an impact (even the smallest one) on the main story, thats even better. I dont know if this is your first fiction....But you REALLY need to work on worldbuilding and character-world, character-character interactions. Than again, maybe i am expecting too much, and i admit that my standards are set quiet high. (But it doesnt change the fact that this fiction is quiet lacking in some aspects) Good luck tho! Writing is hard, writing something good is even harder, but practice matters after all, maybe your next novel will be a masterpiece xD

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Elaconix_HD
Elaconix_HDLv1

I read it because i didn't find anything to read and it's like the worse

IncubusLord
IncubusLordLv1

Is the MC evil?

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pipMcDohl
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In a typical Chinese cultivation light novel, the main character start from the lowest strength only to rise above all. For this miraculous outcome the MC has the help of something that is a complete cheat for cultivating. The MC along the way encounter bad guys, selfish idiots who think they are better than the rest and attack and try to humiliate other just because why not. Trashes. The MC will punish those selfish idiots by attacking and trying to humiliate them because he think he is better than them and because he have the excuses that they were the one who started it. The MC is a freaking psychopath that can murder those who offend him just like that. The other characters that exist are the good guys, that are meant to witness the power of the MC and give him opportunity to get violent with the excuse of protecting the weak against the bad guys. side characters, good or bad, don't need deep personality the just need to trigger the events and thus are shallow. The women are especially shallow thanks to sexist culture. They are just their to fall in love and be sexual trophy. The plots are usually rushed and full of holes. So where is World Domination System among the mass of Chinese cultivation novels? Woman: So far almost no girls in sight. no sexism aside from the fact that all the key spots are hold by men. The MC is not a murderous psychopath. But only because he think he is not powerful enough yet to kill those who offend him. so psychopath is yes. are the side characters only divided with good one and bad one just for the sake of having the MC get violent? Yes, the bad guys will get offended over nothing and the good one are way to kind to be realistic. It's all white or all black. The characters are very shallow. The story don't really care about character building to the point that the one and only friend of the MC is a character that we don't see interacting with the MC. He is just mentionned here and there, and of course he will get bullied by bad guys. So his job is to be a token that trigger the MC's revenge. He don't need to talk or think. the story is only focus on the growth of the MC and him kicking asses. Finally the cultivation cheat Yep it's there of course. it will allow the MC to get strong in everything. strong body, magician, magic craftsman, etc... The originality is his cheat pushing the MC toward world conquest. it should be something that bring an abnormally high deepness to the intrigue and plots. But no as expected of a typical Chinese cultivation random story, this become disappointing as well. Let me spoil the first financial success of the MC as an example: to cultivate energy is required, bloc of ether can release useful energy and thus are pricey. Alas mosquitoes are eating the blocs of ether. In order to protect the warehouse from mosquitoes, the usual method is... to erect expensive magical barriers that only last a few month then must be replaced. The MC find a way to bait and trap mosquitoes, protecting the warehouse at a cheaper cost and thus making tons of money. Flaw one: why stopping simple mosquitoes with expansive military grade magical barrier when you can just build air-proof warehouse and store the bloc of ether in pouches airtight shut? it's just normal weak mosquitoes... it's like killing flies with a rocket launcher. Flaw two: the MC doesn't test his invention over the two month it is supposed to be effective. The effectiveness of his traps might decrease over time for unknown reasons and it can all backfire in his face. Flaw three: the MC sell his product at a given price and receive the entire sum of money as benefit... what about the price for opening his store, what about paying salaries to the manager, etc.. The kingdom is supposed to have heavy taxes policy that cause turmoil and anger among the citizens, yet the MC don't pay any taxes? The plots are rushed and only what allow the MC to be a righteous violent psychopath is relevant for the author. So yeah... Overall another typical cheap cultivation story here that just copy past all the cliché except for sexy women as trophies.

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