Interesting concept so far, I've read up till chapter 34 so what is to be said going forward is only relevant up till those chapters. Recommendations to the author: 1. Get someone to edit your chapters, doesn't have to be a professional editor. In fact, you could also pass it through an application that checks that type of thing automatically. Some misspelled words that are fundamental to the stories development and world background, such as Devine (Divine). As well as some normal misspelling, like: rediculous instead of ridiculous and their when it should be there. Anyways, those are some ****** examples. 2. Fix some verb tenses to match with the correct english grammar to make the story flow better. 3. Would recommend an overhaul on your sentence structures to make them "smoother". Example, instead of "It was summer. The sun was hot and bright. In the Wissian town there was a colosseum. In the colosseum a fight is happenning between the two magicians. The crowd is cheering for their respective supporting fighters" It was summer and the sun was shining strongly upon the colosseum located in the town of Wissian; where two magicians where currently dueling making the crowd go wild, while cheering for their favored fighter. Excuse my grammar mistakes, even though I am criticizing I am not necessarily a good writer. I think that if you made those corrections your story would be so much better. Nevertheless, it's a very interesting story which I will continue to read since it has got interesting concepts and . So kudos to the author.
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