Its too much jammed in one...So hes got these awesome bloodlines, controls all the elements, these equipment tattoos from his multiple professions, this super rare side kick..... it goes on. Its like squashing several op protagonists into on character. This story has enough plot lines for several separate novels. And yet at the same time, the sub plots just repeat over and over. Jealous or greedy characters looking for a spouse is like the cause of everything in this novel. Occasionally the story bucks conventions but other wise hits all of them at the same time. Not worth the premium cost but otherwise a decent time killer.
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LIKEFurthermore the pacing is ridiculous! His age is arbitrary and irrelevant to his never changing mindset/maturity. His goes to multiple schools and country but that gets hand waved away. He’s spent 8 years in school without ever attending a class? It was just briefly mentioned that his tutors taught him some things. ... its mess and unwieldy. Seriously this novel could be broken up into 3 or 4 decent ones set in the same world with different protagonists.
I admit that I started him too young and regretted it but it was too late to delete and start over at that point. That’s why he comes across too mature for a child under 10. But it would have been weird to skip too much time. I appreciate your feedback since I do see where you are coming from. I think I was just trying to pull from all my favorite stories and make up my own world but it became too much. Trust me, I’m starting to realize that as well since it’s hard for me to keep track. I think creating an outline has started to help me find the route I want to go. Thank you for the honest feedback! I like reading through sincere reviews whether it’s criticism or compliment.
I really did enjoy quite a bit of it, especially when the potential antagonists made reasonable common sense decisions haha!
I’m in a similar boat with my own outline, trying to reign in an ongoing Webnovel to fit 3 act structured pacing is soul crushing in some ways.
I’m in a similar boat with my own outline, trying to reign in an ongoing Webnovel to fit 3 act structured pacing is soul crushing in some ways.