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Daoist_Angel_Blue
Daoist_Angel_BlueLv146yr
2018-07-02 15:01

I want to like the story, but the grammar is just hard to stomach after 10 or 15 chapters... please find a beta or proofreader... This story has so much potential, but the bad English is ruining the enjoyment of the story.

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Oppaislife
OppaislifeLv5

Is this good?

Daoist_Angel_Blue
Daoist_Angel_BlueLv14

It has potential, but the grammar (when I read it) is quite bad. MTL might be better.

Oppaislife:Is this good?
animangaex
animangaexLv7

If you like OP MCs.

Oppaislife:Is this good?
Abendfeuer
AbendfeuerLv14

I agree, stopped after 5 chapters

Juliet_Bibi
Juliet_BibiLv2

Nice

Juliet_Bibi
Juliet_BibiLv2

Nice

Neko_Nyaa
Neko_NyaaLv2

hey can someone tell me if there is romance or harem in this novel????

IMPAiLER
IMPAiLERLv5

there is. I think

Neko_Nyaa:hey can someone tell me if there is romance or harem in this novel????
Jmitch1
Jmitch1Lv15

Yeah… can’t Continue . Bad English

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phamtonbullet
phamtonbulletAuthor

Hello, everyone, I am the author of The supreme sovereign system, phamtonbullet, I just wanted to say a few things , believe me I am doing this just to express my opinion and not to shamelessly add reviews to the novel :v , so here we go: 1) I know that my nick name is writing wrong, it should be phantombullet but It was already taken, uwu. 2) I always read your comments my beloved readers, every time that you post a commend in any chapter, I read it. I know a few of you who always thanks me for the chapter, I really, really appreciate it. 3) As you may already notice, I have problems with the grammar , I am really sorry about that, I always feel bad about this, I am planning to take a few days to edit all my past chapters (1-25). I am using a few grammars correctos, and I am trying to find someone to be my proofreader(this was a suggestion from you) , in conclusion , I will do my best to give all of you a writing quality that you deserved. 3) As I was saying, I always read your commends, I know a lot of people have been complaining about the fact that I called Artemis, Artemisa. Well, the thing is this, I have ALWAYS called her by that name xD . I planned to leave it that way, however, to give you a better time in reading the novel, I changed to Artemis in chapter 30 and it will stay that way from now on. 4) This novel will be a long one, The adventures of Alfonso are just beginning, some of you have asked if Alfonso will get superpower and fight by himself, well, I won't spoil you, so I won't answer, I will only say that Alfonso would have to use his head more than his muscles...(he is crippled anyway, :v) 5) I will now(02/07/2018) put a bonus chapter system, however , to have them, I will have to shamelessly ask for your votes(spirit stones) , this bonus chapters will be given depending on what position we ended on the week: - Ranked between 90-80 : 1 bonus chapter - Ranked between 70-60 : 2 bonus chapters - Ranked between 50-40 : 3 bonus chapters I will stop there, lets be honest, we have a long way to get to further positions, when this novel consolidates itself better , I will do another system of bonus chapters. 6) I usually post 1 chapter per day. 7) Finally, I want to thank you all of you who follow the adventures of Alfonso, please keep looking forward for it! And for the ones who are just reading reviews, what are you waiting for? Alfonso Lockheart command you! Read it!

Herien
HerienLv14

The writing is lower on the spectrum but I won't say trash to others novel I read. However, from the comment I read so far it seem that it really bad before he got an editor. There might be fews errors stil in need of tweak. What kill me is the characters and the setting;to be specefic it would be system. The system is absurd as it can summon gods yet it can't fucking heal the main protagonist. Then the wolf ****en neuter that leg. I couldve deal with a weak character but strong in other areas but when the MC solve the problem through plot Amor by allying with the wolf that made him pratically dead as a character and more of a puppet. The otherhand, the puppeter isnt well thought out or I'm expecting too much from a system novel. It doesnt give ant expantion of the system and why it all Earth(Greek) Gods. For example. Were the Greek God s ever worshipped in the the new the planet or is the system just generating/ acquiring Souls with potential of being gods with the geberated menories basebon the epics og hero and gods from Earth. Also, it seem that that MC could be more than a mortal or a mere God base on the system method of empowering him through collecing ,training, and battling wild goddesses. Also, i wouldnt have mind if he sacrifice a leg for godly speed or something but no he had to plotamored into allying with a wolf that would eventually be enemies. I say that because the wolf or Lyon; whaterver the greek word for wolf will be enemoes base on his backstory and MC identity of work traveler from a modern Democrat developed country which destroy the envirement and treat animal as pet as well. So it pointless and meanless other waste of time . ******Note I haven't got passchapter 50

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