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Picnictime
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2020-12-13 15:26

I've had chapter 1 of this story opened in a new tab for almost 2 months ever since I found it while browsing for things to read, but I finally found the will within me to begin reading and find something good. Chapter 1, he dies. Makes sense given it's a Reincarnation novel. The grammar is painful to read, but I have hopes that it'll get better. I find the purity of the demon lord's lust for a fun battle to the death exciting. I prepare myself for the new experiences and people he'll meet when he reincarnates... and then it happens. Every sentence I read, every new interaction, reaction, and action the characters make makes me more and more nauseous as I scream (silently) into my pillow. It just gets cringier and cringier with cliches that I would normally be fine with thrown into the mix until I get to chapter 14 and I just can't take it anymore. The god awful sentence structure and comma placement is still bad, and I just can't. I tried turning off my brain and enjoying the story for what it is, but it wasn't enough. I check the comments and reviews to see a generally really positive reception for the story with a few outliers who share my opinion. I'm sure there's SOME kind of great, next level character development that really saves the story in the future, but I'll be crying myself to sleep and wondering if I'm really the crazy one for thinking this isn't writing worthy of praise before I ever get there. And yes, I'm well aware that everyone is entitled to their opinion and that some people do like the story, dear Author. Apparently many people like it, and I just don't get it. Don't try to reason with me: I'm just here to leave my honest review and then forget I read this. Hopefully my opinion gets buried by all of the positive reviews so people don't have to see my disparaging words.

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lynerparel
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thank you for the review, also in reading my work. I won't be reasoning with you just want to say 😊 thanks. Also will try editing the beginning chapters a bit later.

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All my reviews are truthful (The way I review originals and translations are different), I'm not going to try and inflate anyone's egos if the book doesn't justify it. Writing Quality 4/5: The transitions are pretty smooth, nothing much to say here. (There are naturally your occasional grammar mistakes, but I'm not going to nit-pick something so miniscule. These occasional bumps in the writing have no major effect on the actual flow of the writing, which is really good for an ******* writer on WN; where english isn't the first language for many of the readers/writers.) E.g, In this novel you get your occasional use of 'Superfluous Commas', (where the writer uses a comma before because even though it is not necessary.) Examples of the types of minor errors I'm talking about, Unlike his demon family who only respected him, because of his power (Now, your typical extremely minor mistakes.) Kretos tried to speak, but was unable to. It would seem that his body wasn't develop enough to do such a thing. - Let's be honest here, we all know that it should be 'developed' and our eyes would auto-correct it pretty quickly anyway. --------------------------------------------------------------------------- It was at this point in time, Kretos lifted his arms he finally noticed that his arms were small and dainty. This was not the arm of the supreme overlord, this was the arms of a baby. --------------------------------------------------------------------------- (Alright, it doesn't take a genius to recognize that these two sentences aren't perfect. Yet, we as your average readers can easily understand the general plot and direction the author is heading with.) Stability of Updates 5/5: The updates appear punctual (good to see) Story Development: The story is primarily about the MC progressing to become more 'human', he enjoys the warm feeling of love and care from a paternal family which is progress. Character Design: So far I can say that reading only 10 chapters, the MC has character. I admired the way he greeted his son's betrayal, even though it's not very 'realistic' in human terms I still enjoyed reading it nevertheless. Perhaps I've grown tired of the common trope, 'You, a haughty young master stared at my girl? Prepare for the nine familial exterminations.' Yet, this is also the character's double-edged sword. (You get the feeling that since he can greet death so casually, why won't he just do the same in his next life? — This may just be my own personal agenda against tropes like these, many readers would enjoy this type of MC though, so no massive complaints here.) The writer is able to give a seperate and unique personality to his main cast, so it doesn't feel like that we the readers are reading 2D cardboard cut-outs. So here's my conclusion, if you enjoy the magical world of 'elves', 'demons' etc you will probably enjoy this novel. Personally, it's not my cup of tea, the novels I enjoy are less main-stream. (The types of MC I admire also differ to this type of MC portrayed by the writer, but I can't comment on 'Writing Quality' in the review due to my personal preferences.) Overall Review: 4/5 (For an original it's definitely above average, but would I compare it to the likes of a novel like CCG, or perhaps even the averagely translated Shadow Hack? No fucking way.) My personal recommendations: Doomed To Be Cannon Fodder, Transmigator Meets Reincarnator, EMHS, Lord Xue Ying If anyone wants me to do an in-depth review, simply @reply to me in one of my reviews and I'll do a truthful in-depth review if I can actually understand the flow of the writing. (I write these reviews so that the section for determining whether someone reads a story is actually truthful and not full of deceit.)

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