Harry Potter : Arc of Embodiment ( Rewrite )

good book waiting for a bloodline le fay, ambrosius, pendragon to rule the wizarding world hope you're a slytherin after all you have a noble bloodline and are superior to those slytherin idiots. preferably main girl luna is cute '-'

So far with 9 chapters this feels like it should be a really good one. The author has not put any severe limitations on the growth of our character which shows they so far know how to handle a fairly strong one. any limitations so far are more natural feeling than an author level putting the breaks on it feels more like he's just simply only limited by the realities of his situation such as not being instantly ubher because he's young and magic just taking a lot of his pool to make something a bit too powerful for instance he was able to strengthen his bloodline but that took a large portion of his magic till he rests or meditates. No moving on to the inevitability that is negative aspects I dont care much for. the only and I mean ONLY part I haven't liked so much is the one time the character made and used a cultivator bs potion for blood refinement(and I only dont like that because it actually doesnt fit in with modern science at all the thought that we have black impurities sitting in our bodies should only apply to smokers or folk who have abused their bodies in some way or another since fat is actually essential to the body eliminating it actually would do more harm than good and make you more susceptible to diseases and many other detriments.) and if it stays that way I'll stay happy. overall 4.8 out of 5 from me. Ps for the author here; work on the updates a bit for that perfect score and remember our extensive studies in the translation community show that if you cut the chapter size down a bit to get more releases your novel can be more habit forming and far more popular than simmilar sized ones that only release a few times a week. think about it if you can make this novel a part of someone's daily routine the act of coming here to read becomes the same as getting a cup of coffee after waking up, a daily occurrence that they won't want to be without.

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1. MC is OP (🙄👎) (magic power op) 2. MC is fool: -Transmigration -> Be MC OP -> MC Go Hogwarts -> .... chapters equal to the original story? 3. Why go to Hogwarts? Why not leave England? (Literally has magic) 4. Will Mark have the stupid hero complex?

Let's be honest here... I lost my interest as soon as I read that he found Liquid Luck on some random Death Eaters and Aurors. Liquid Luck or Felix Felicis is one of hardest potion to brew. In HP books or the movies there is only one person who has the ability to brew that potion. Horace Slughorn and Liquid Luck is highly toxic for a someone so young... Even adults could only ingest a couple of drops. Liquid Luck is highly regulated by the ministry too and I understand that he might have found it on some random Death Eater because they don't follow laws but it's still absurd. Where did he get Liquid Luck from?? Even Ol Vodlie never got his hands on Liquid Luck or he would have taken over Britian without much difficulty and your timeline is pretty messed up. There is no way that Death Eaters were still operating while donning their Death Eater Regalia in the year of 1984. Voldie lost his body in 1981 and after that Death Eaters were either sentenced to Azkaban or the bribed their way out of Azkaban using Imperius Defense. Now if you have said that he had found Liquid Luck in the vaults of Pendragon or Fey then it would have been more logical than founding it on some random Death Eater or Auror. But the main problem of this story is something completely different. You don't explain things, in the first chapter you siad that he found secret base and whatever but how did he even know that?? Then how did he even nullify the tracking charms... You never explained that. You siad he used AOE but that doesn't work like that. Then how did he even train? The lack of details is the major put off in this story. If you are doing something in the story then explain it. Don't leave it hanging...

basically it's a over convenient story where he gets whatever he needs including bloodlines of pendragon and fey. he talks about limitations but everything he has or gets is overpowering and over used. if your looking for a decent au story then this isnt it. this story is just a HUGE WISH FULFILLMENT story.

So I don't really see the point of reading this story. Chapter 1 is basically MC wakes up finds dead bodies where he got a house trunk, books, wands, cash, potions including felix felicis. And he is so OP that by chapter 4 it's only a matter of time before he can do ANYTHING with his magic. There is no tension. Nothing that would make you want to read. The MC is boring and one dimensional.

now this is actually a nice Harry Potter fic with a balanced medium as it equally contains magical elements and politics in the plot which makes it a ideal HP fanfic so yeah over all it is good it's worth a try

4 amazing chapters 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁

Honestly, your writing is confusing, you don't explain the things that go on and it also makes the MC so op, it doesn't even make sense. The goblins would never make a deal without at least knowing where the money came from, and you never explained how the MC trained his powers, even though you made a training schedule, on top of that, you never explained exactly how the MC reincarnated and also tries to add things at each step, but without explaining anything leaving the story confused and without any cohesion.

good job waiting for more. I do hope the author doesn't stray to far from logic and makes the magic the character uses at least semi-believable.

Amazing moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

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Honestly I don't care if it's unoriginal. I'm more annoyed by the fact that it's 29 chapters in and he hasn't even gotten to hogwarts. Lol for an author who moves at a snail place and says they are doing this for fun you're very ambitious. Seeing as the ambition doesn't match the dedication and I've wasted my time reading a glorified prologue, it lets me know this story will never gain proper traction, after all its just for fun lol.

The author nerfed Arc of Embodiment way too much, also the mc is an idiot who limited himself in a world where the majority of people can kill him, also the grammar is awful and needs a lot of work

I tried to like it but blatantly giving the MC a power to make "anything" and then restricting him every other chapter for one fake reason or another you might as well have just given him a dumb down version of the Philosopher's Stone at least it would explain why he's pretty much only making gold also dude literally says it's easy/cheap to make non-magical stuff and then robs of furniture store instead of just you know.. making it don't even get me started on the fact that he doesn't "like" to make consumables

interesting

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