Voryn987
I write on ao3 under the pseudonym of Taloso. I read books on ao3, fanfic.net, space battles and web novel.
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Voryn98715dCommentedCh 114 "Your Name" Release Date Set (2-in-1)- Voryn9873mthReplied to TheBurningLetter
This is mostly wrong. This quote, is originally attributed to The Buddha, who, upon birth, took 7 steps in the cardinal directions and proclaimed "Throughout the heavens and earth, I alone, am the honoured one. I shall dispel all the suffering of the world" It has been heavily popularised within recent years, with many anime, such as Ju-jutsu Kaisen, Shuumatsu no Valkyrie and even Tokyo Revengers all using it.
"I am the rejected one." - Voryn9873mthReplied to bob685014
Misinformation and Feminist propaganda, likely from TikTok. Lilith was a demon, much like Lucifer. The creation story in the bible holds no mention of Lilith. Eve was the first woman, along with Adam - the first man. Anything that is not in the word of God (the bible) is a false man made doctrine - this includes the belief that Lilith was the first woman.
I clapped my hands, wiping the haziness from their eyes as they looked at me with more clarity. "You are the first humans, Adam, Lilith. Be fruitful and multiply, expand your race, and hold dominion over all on Earth for all time." I waved my hand through the air and a lush garden with golden gates bearing every single plant on the planet sprung into view. I took a moment to admire my work. - Voryn9873mthReplied to daydreamer_no1
Cambridge dictionary: a large sum of money that a company gives to an employee when he or she leaves, as a reward for long service or good work.
"The deed of injuring the Third Mizukage and forcing him back to Kirigakure is already quite loud, if he does something even more attention catching, you should prepare yourself for the golden handshake" - Voryn9876mthReplied to HOLY_BOB
- Voryn9871yrPosted
Writing quality is decent itself with proper grammar, and the author seems to consistently update this story which is good, he uses Naruto as the world background (reason for 5 stars on it) however his character design is terrible. He says the character will not be OP at the start however within the first few chapters he’s too strong at a very young age. He seems to one day just walk into the academy and instantly graduate (no chapter showing his previous time spent at the academy??? Wtf?) no one in the academy knows him and everyone is surprised by him, Sakura and ino for seemingly no reason start an ‘arguement’ where mc tells them to shut up and then walks away - this (ino) says is ‘cute’?? And Sakura in a cliche way says “oh he can’t beat my sasuke” (not exactly but roughly same lines) then he sits down waiting for the teacher and he has a genin test (again, no chapter showing his previous training? Wtf author?) he passes the test perfectly and then it shows two people (I assume the, to be danzo and some root person) talking about mc and think he is a spy (author again, wtf why are u not writing anything for them to think that or show mc previous actions), then he meets his Jonin sensei which is Anko but he’s arrogant and says “spar with me.” And says “I won’t call someone master unless their stronger than me” (again roughly what he says) they spar and apparently gai and his team is nearby and of course there’s gotta be insults there to make his shocking victory over Anko seem more impressive. He easily beats her breaking no sweat over it and the. Offers to remove her curse seal again, I assume he’s 7- 8 or same age as original cast, wtf a 7-8 year old is so skilled and memorised in fuinjutsu that he can easily deal with Orochimaru curse seal, which kind you is an art that even jiraya couldn’t undo. Next chapter has him absorb the seal into himself (absorbing Orochimaru soul, which why isn’t their a scene showing Orochimaru feeling his soul being move / absorbed? It’s a soul bro) but then Anko goes crazy and then they’re in the hokage office where hiruzen is saying “are you sure ur not connected with him” (him being Orochimaru) and hiruzen says “your not a spy right” (like bro wtf a spy would never admit he is to the leader of an enemy camp) I got up to that point and simply couldn’t force myself to read anymore. The author simply lies and I don’t mean to hate but this story was terrible and made me want to kill myself. I sincerely don’t understand why so many people gave a rating of 4 or 5 stars but they didn’t read the same book I did. Perhaps I may have set the bar high but I don’t think having proper grammar, explanations and a bit of background is hard to do (this coming from a writer - me on AO3, you can find me as Taloso or Voryn) Author I suggest you get better at writing.
- Voryn9871yrPosted
The story (actual chapters) are of decent quality. What I hate is how 90% of these “chapters” are just him promoting his patron and asking for powerstones. I was fooled into reading this by the 4.7 stars it has however its terrible “chapters” bring an originally decent story to a terrible one. Very disappointing.
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