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Appreciate your thoughtful review, currently, I'll be taking this book for a break/pause to fix some of its problems. just like you and others mentioned. hopefully, you find this book enjoyable in the future.

thank you for taking a look at the story. the advice you give me, i'll try as much as possble to fix some of them. not really confence with gramar skills but will try [img=recommend]

The plot as far as I have read is great. Can't wait to find out how Cain and Ashur are related to each other when I delve further. If I have to say my piece, there was a few errors but its interesting overall. I wanted to give a 4.9 review rating but it always went to 4.8. Either way the story is good ignoring the minimal errors at first so I think the 5/5 is okay. So far this novel does not seem to bore me, there were a few errors but it's interesting. the plot is great altho not much I can say about the daily updates tho..... characters are fantastic I wonder if Cain and Ashur are related or brothers perhaps. anyway I give this read a 4.0 / 5 good one author [img=update]

Yo this novel is my cup o tea ngl. im sucker for simple old slice of life stories with no drama. just wholesome. the writing simple and easy to unserstand. bais gramar is ok. story itself is kinda fun and entertaining to read man too bad its short hopefully this het more chapters :( over all i give story a personal 6 cinimal rolls of sweet over 10 it got somw flaws but a still good read nice work author [img=recommend]

i'll keep that up

I'll say this first your writing need some impovent,tbh I really like how this story like movie script. the story itself is good I like how mature and mystery that I'm getting from the few five chapters. the world background is kinda nice to know that there small details consider like the character and the world around them. overall my tip is that improve writing and editing cause sometimes dialogues are confusing.

Thank you for the honest review, I'll be making sure to fix them. the red hood and Jocker dynamic is really entertaining for me to write, hopefully, you enjoy more chapters in the future.

Have read 5 chaps of this novel. first I like the mc his very smart and has some sense in him to other stories that have a similar concept to this who had characters who are ignorant and cocky the authors say it is part of their charters but when it comes to the end of their stories they didn't even change. Okay the writing needs some improvement when it comes to action scenes sometimes it feels short and lacks some, I'm not saying that your writing is bad, and your grammar is alright but in case of miss typos recommended for you reread the chap before uploading. The story got some lore I'll say that the world-building is still confused about what setting this takes place idk probably just me, I might read more chaps to fully grasp what's going on. but overall a good read for killing time

A decent read for a usual system novel, the beginning is quite confusing but in later chapters are good and funny, the only into like this novel the most is how the author shows how depressed is the mc. it really give him depth on its characterisation.

Overall the novel i'll give it a 7/10 from its writing alone I can tell that be author have some experience with handling its character, some my issued are the grammar need some improve but further reading I guess Author fix some of them. Too bad it's only 50chps it would be nice if were full blown series with at least 100+ chps. my only tips I can give is that expand more with r world building & characters I'm sure some of your new titles will surely be better.

go read but a reminder the last chapter is not going to end with the usual harem route. so place your bets on the heroines ya like. [img=proud]

first and foremost the story really does interest me however the writing is.... very shet, for one the grammars need some fixing, and what the hell are those long as s paragraphs, seriously make it short and clear, my phone fell from my face as I dose off reading in the early chapters. Characters let's just say too bland, can't even remember their names, or even have one, especially the Mc.

Oh my god, this is such long as s paragraphs

'll say after reading this story, will be on my good she t list, the writing itself was great although the dialogue is sometimes confusing, but the character do the heavy lifting from their design and interaction, the world building is one thing a mystery still don't know what comes after next, I'll be sure to read this from time to time. Overall try making the dialogue clear and easy to read next time, kudos for the aurthor