Don't let it get to you. I know that English is a hard language to master especially for writing because of all the unspoken rules. I'm unsure if you're first language is English but I saw that you did try hard to write without mistakes. I hope you write more and give me a good story to read. I'll be waiting for each new chapter

Here's a genuine power stone my friend. :)

Nice. I got to say, I like where this is going. You're writing is actually pretty good compared to some of the other stuff I've read and I hope you keep it up! Reading your work made me realize that I should be focusing on both of my stories instead of this, but this was too good to pass up. By the way, what's your release schedule looking like?

Hello, I read through your first 4 chapters and I'm quite pleased. Your world building, storyline and prologue are excellent. Compared to some of the other works I've read, I can tell that you plan and are a good writer. The only criticism that I can give you is that there are times where your syntax and verbs are a little messed up. For example, there should be times where words should be switched around like "forever loner" should be "loner forever" which are common mistakes. There are also times where you switch between present tense verbs and past tense in the same paragraph making the reading seem a little off. However! These are the only issues I had with the text and I found that the rest was very good. Please continue writing because you are definitely getting somewhere with this story! :)

Hello! I read through 4 chapters so far and I have to say that I'm impressed. Your writing style and grammar are above an beyond what I'm used to seeing. It contained a lot of personality and genuine effort. I have to be honest that I have little reading experience when it comes to novels of this type (0 LGBTQ+ books read so far) so I canto comment on how it fares to it's competition in the genre at large. I must be honest and say that I was a little uncomfortable reading this as a guy, but please don't let that distract you and keep writing!! Good luck and Have a good time!

Yeah I know personally that it's difficult to find inspiration for a novel. Keep up the good work and I hope you post soon!

Okay I understand. Thanks. But is fire manipulation not an ability then? If they can take a beasts ability for their own, and that beast has fire manipulation as an ability, then couldn't they take it and use it?

Kai is going to be really sad when he's barely 5 feet tall at the age of 20. Training like mad when you're young will stunt your growth. But I mean, there's worse things than looking like Asta from Black Clover.

Umm... if you can use a fire ability, aren't you manipulating the element? Even if you can only use one ability you are still able to manipulate the element for the one spell to work. Or are you trying to say that they can only use the single ability? I'm confused

I really liked the prologue. Although there were some small things I didn't like, it was an interesting story and I'm looking forward to how this prologue will relate to the story at large.

"Easy", he said. Yeah. okay... Not the word I would be using to describe infiltrating a gang base, making it past the guards and reaching the inner most room with his only weapon being a homemade revolver that is more likely to blow up then actually fire effectively.

This guy made a handmade/homemade gun in 3 days? This guy's not f****** around.

How is a lot of important information easily found by a 17 year old with internet access? I think this biker gang deserves to be put down if they're this a** at covering their tracks.

Kind of confused on how he would be able to see a gun in the inside pocked on the guy. If it was a pistol, it wouldn't be very visible or shake that much and I don't think the guy was running with an assault rifle in his coat. But, get it, story's gotta story. Other than that, Good job and thanks for the chapter.

I like it. I see some grammatical and other errors but nothing terrible. I'm kind of scared how comparable this is to me at the moment. You wouldn't have cameras installed in my house...would you?

This is getting scarily relatable...

Actually what I said this morning when I woke up...