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Harlos

Harlos

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2020-11-30 JoinedGermany
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  • Harlos
    Harlos2yr
    Posted

    Hello people reading this! Let me start this review by saying that I had read the first work of the author and can say that this one is an improvement. It contains Vampires, Werewolves and more subjects that are interesting, but the multiple POVs aren't for everyone and can be challenging to follow. Still, this seems like an interesting story to follow and looking forward to read more.

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    Darien's Legacy
    Fantasy · TheShingPen
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  • Harlos
    Harlos2yr
    Posted

    Good story and also good start and development is decent and smooth. I wish you all the best in the future with your book dear author. keep on writing

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    The Curse Fulfillers [ His one and only ]
    Fantasy · Kirtirajput
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  • Harlos
    Harlos2yr
    Posted

    Just to fillthe requirement of 10 reviews. For those who care: I voted Writing Quality 4, stability of updates 5, Story development 4, character design 3 and world background 4. I'm not sure whether the first half of the novel to this date dare too fast-paced. Will just rely on possible future readers here.

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    Avescar - Adventures of Kiyu
    Fantasy · Harlos
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  • Harlos
    Harlos3yr
    Posted

    The first chapters give a promising and thrilling outview and can easily make readers want to read more. The writing style is descriptive and fine and it's a worth to read if you like crime solving

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    The Whitechapel Murderer
    Realistic · Aislinn_Jasper
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  • Harlos
    Harlos3yr
    Replied to Wolfgirl1215

    Actually that will be explained. .. .the next chapter iirc. Or the the after that

    Ch 4 6 Years later
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    Avescar - Adventures of Kiyu
    Fantasy · Harlos
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  • Harlos
    Harlos3yr
    Posted

    Reading the story really consumes your time without you realizing how much time you already read it. 3 Chapters passed by as if they were nothing because the flow of the story is workd out very well. For the character, i like Red so far and it sounds like she's a young, maybe a bit naive but pure and kind woman who gets dragged into more that she can understand with her simplicity of life.

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    Red's First Love
    Fantasy · midnight_bloom
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  • Harlos
    Harlos3yr
    Commented

    This world is just.......yeah.... really makes feeling sorry for the MC

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    Re:Sub [Go to Repost]
    Horror · Geminel
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  • Harlos
    Harlos3yr
    Posted

    Nothing really critical to criticize here. Only think I'd recommend is getting rid of the [Internally]. Up to Chapter 3 I haven't seen a reason at least why it wouldn't be possible to just go with ' ' as thoughts. The story is somewhat catchy because it has it's own, funny charm. Other than that: 1. Poor Lucas 2. Even more poor lucas 3. It reminds me a bit of Erased. But instead of traveling back in time to avoid something bad that happens around him, he dies when he misses the chance to fulfill his good deed.

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    Horror · Geminel
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  • Harlos
    Harlos3yr
    Commented

    Yeah..... I definitely don't like her. Overly arrogant person

    "Good. Then grovel on the ground." I pointed towards my feet. "If you are an insect, then you should act like an insect."
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    PENANCE
    Fantasy · Mineva
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  • Harlos
    Harlos3yr
    Posted

    The first chapter caught me off guard tbh and I didn't understand a thing. But towards the end of the first chapter it finally clicked! The story is interesting and exciting. Writing quality maybe needs some check in terms of grammar but beside that it's fine. Development of character as well as unfolding the world is enjoyabl p.s.: I hate Alagarassi. Seems like an annoying, arrogant woman

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    PENANCE
    Fantasy · Mineva
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  • Harlos
    Harlos3yr
    Commented

    Spying the vampire court..... Yeah, that sounds like troublesome times ahead :D

    Ch 4 The beginnings of a plan
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    When Blood Runs Cold
    Fantasy · Wolfgirl1215
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  • Harlos
    Harlos3yr
    Replied to Harlos

    *far more

    3000 years ago, back when the Angels ruled over all of Faey, the vampires came. It was on the anniversary of the Angel Queen's coronation- Queen Celeste was her name, Serena's great Grandmother. A banquet was held for the folk all over the land; the angels of the Illistrae clan were generous, all were welcome to their home to dance the night away in garments of royal splendour.
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    When Blood Runs Cold
    Fantasy · Wolfgirl1215
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  • Harlos
    Harlos3yr
    Commented

    I'm telling you.... Sounds like the begin of an epos. But I like it. It's more than an average fantasy romance so far

    3000 years ago, back when the Angels ruled over all of Faey, the vampires came. It was on the anniversary of the Angel Queen's coronation- Queen Celeste was her name, Serena's great Grandmother. A banquet was held for the folk all over the land; the angels of the Illistrae clan were generous, all were welcome to their home to dance the night away in garments of royal splendour.
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    When Blood Runs Cold
    Fantasy · Wolfgirl1215
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  • Harlos
    Harlos3yr
    Posted

    The first few chapters alone feel like an upcoming epos about angels vs vampires. I just read through the first chapters so far. The writing quality is really good and descriptive where it needs to be. I'm not a huge fan of fantasy romance tbh but this one has the skills to keep me reading it

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    When Blood Runs Cold
    Fantasy · Wolfgirl1215
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  • Harlos
    Harlos3yr
    Replied to Wolfgirl1215

    Hi, sorry if I didn't point that out well. Since she's possessed by an evil spirit, you could say so. Even though it's more or less involuntarily.

    Ch 2 Catastrophe
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    Avescar - Adventures of Kiyu
    Fantasy · Harlos
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