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lstreader2dReplied to nablethenobleChakra isn't really an end all be all though, I remember Kakashi had very little charka. Lee and Guy too barely use any. Sakura too is said to have a small amount of chakra due to her parents only being civilian born Genin instead of clan members, but she overcame it with incredible chakra control. With both Shou and Haku being Yuki clan members and training since a young age they should end up having quite large amounts, I mean there were plenty of incredibly powerful ninja who didn't have access to a Tailed Beast
He listed all possible things he remembered he could use to get chakra. This lack of chakra limits him... He can't fight Uchiha susanoo, juubi, or Madara or even kaguya without chakra. And at the very least, if they joined ninja war in the future against Madara he does not want to be cannon fodder and die a meaningless death and wants to protect both Haku and Zabuza.- lstreader9dCommented
I thought he had control over his haki and wouldn't accidentally use it like this
And its all due to Yoriichi because right this moment Yoriichi is unconscious using conqueror haki which knocks anyone unconscious who is daring to oppose or even trying to stop him - lstreader10dCommented
If this is like the anime, weren't the Kanto starters considered to be rare? I would imagine the more common pokemon would be Pikachu, Meowth, etc, especially in Kanto
Looking around it was common that multiple Pokemon were walking by people. While not everyone seems to be trainers, these pocket monsters are a sort of pet. Pokemon like Growlithe, the Three Kanto Starters, Vulpix and Eevee were the most common ones. - lstreader10dCommented
I think you mean anthropomorphic
Speaking of magic, I won't lie the aspects of my abilities really confused me to a capital T. First when using my owl form, I looked like an owl version of a harpy instead of aa actual owl, next was the ant form it transformed me into and anthroponomic bull ant. Then I remembered that it depends on me as the user to full transform or transform parts of my body. - lstreader10dCommented
Bad grammar, this must be a translation because the quote is: "Power comes in response to a need, not a desire"
'I HAVE WINGS AND TALONS!!' I thought to myself as I noticed there was a magic circle beneath me and I might have taken over that owl. 'Hm guess Son Goku was right power comes at a need to at a want.' I than flew out of there as far away from the bears as possible and landed on a nearby extremely tree. - lstreader16dCommented
3 Hours straight isn’t that long to work
I then stood up from my chair since my butt had fallen asleep, and it needed to be waken up. Though since I've been in my office here at A.I.M. HQ working for three hours straight I get why it fell asleep in the first place. - lstreader18dPosted
Honestly, a really great idea for the fanfic, but its execution is terrible. Grammar is not good, possibly because it seems like it might be translated. Little to no dialogue, and they don't even add " " to show someone is speaking. They don't show Toji's thoughts for being reincarnated, ending up in the shinobi world, or anything else. He just trains and then works as a mercenary, nothing else interesting happens. He barely meets anyone or talks to anyone. Anyways, I gave a 2.4/5
- lstreader20dPosted
Overall, a good story. I like the idea, it's unique from other pokemon fanfictions I've read in the past. It's quite early on in the story though, with the MC only being five as of Chap 40. My biggest issue is the writing style. The author writes in an overly flowery manner, and it's become quite annoying after a while, so I gave the writing quality only a 3 stars. Despite my dislike for the exaggerated writing style, there's few spelling mistakes and grammar issues that I've noticed.
- lstreader26dReplied to RoughSea
Unless I missed it, they didn't even mention learning Thunder Wave too
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You mean Staravia? Staraptors are 1.2 m
Through this period of training, Tailow's size had increased significantly. From its original height of about 0.3 meters, it had grown to about 0.5 meters, almost catching up to poorly developed Staraptors. - lstreader1mthReplied to yellowjacket65
ascend*
In case something unexpected happens, the camp has orders to gather their equipment and descend to the 37th floor. - lstreader1mthCommented
I'm not sure if this is because it's an AU, but there have been non-human chancellors before
Although the Senate isn't overtly racist, as they have all sorts of races populating its many seats, only humans have ever been elected Chancellor, which is why he was relying so heavily on his apprentice at the moment. - lstreader1mthCommented
How would that Vulpix end up there, I thought Alola was a newly found region by the time Ash traveled there, and this point it would have been completely unknown
The white Pokemon was actually a version of Vulpix that was from the Alola Region. Carolina had heard about it before but thought they were only legends since they rarely left their mountains. But after checking out the typing of the Pokemon and running various tests, she finally confirmed that it was indeed a member of the elusive version of this Pokemon. - lstreader1mthCommented
Thought it was white and not purple
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Yoriichi had a wife before so he knows how to properly interact with others, I don't think he was this socially inept
Yoriichi didn't know what to do other than stand still until she calmed down while the man went to short hair woman - lstreader1mthCommented
Need to make sure to add commas
The Galactic Republic Senator from Chalacta Yudrish Sedran. - lstreader2mthCommented
Sake*
"Oi! Brat! Get me a bottle of Saki!" Said a drunken man in a black wife beater and jeans. - lstreader2mthCommented
Earth is still there though? Night City is just that, a city.
When he awoke, he found himself in a world that was nothing like the one he had known. Earth was gone, replaced by Night City, a place of extremes and excess. The accident had left him scarred, and he had been forced to turn to the dark side of cyberware to rebuild his shattered body. - lstreader3mthCommented
Dude just said how he should take it easy and then immediately goes and does all that
"Too easy... couldn't they make it stronger?" I muttered, surveying the colossus.