Gabuji
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I like the way you use you words, It flows very well. I'm liking the story, and even the first chapter had a very strong opening and strong ending. Keep it up. You're doing very well.
This is not a story I would normally read. But to me, a story is a story and you did pretty well for the first chapter. It has potential for it's genre but I have to say. You have a lot of run on sentences, and your grammar can use a little work. Besides that, your story got to the point and gave out great visuals. Keep going, I can see this being a great story for those who enjoy this genre. I'll probably come back and keep reading for myself to be honest.
If you're going to write a story like this you might as well go all out. Use the words associated with this "thing" you're talking about. Trust me, we know what it is.
It was very interesting. I never really read a story like this and for what the story is, I enjoyed it. I'd like to see what the MC ends up doing. Like if she branches off and lives life her way, or stick to ways she knows.
I smiled when I saw the first chapter. I looked at it and saw how small it was and said interesting. Then I read it. At first I thought it was just a message from the author, but no, it was an actual chapter. That really caught me by surprise. Especially since it was a really good chapter. I pretty much had to keep reading from there. But I have to say, I don't think I've ever really seen something like that, and I enjoyed it.
This is the best written story I've read in a while. Every sentence flowed off my tongue, and the descriptions were amazing. I like the dark theme of the story and the ruthlessness of some characters. I also love stories that aren't afraid to kill of characters or at least willing too. I definitely recommend this book.
Thank you. I dislike missing mistakes but I guess it's bound to happen. Thank you again
From what I read I like this story. I always enjoy when there's a confident strong enemy, that just gets wailed on unexpectedly by someone they underestimated. Plus, I like strong female leads.