The authors' choice of transmigration and immaturity doesn't go along well together. A grown man acting all childish doesn't go along that's all.Also the development, till 16 chapters not even a day has passed. Thousands of words and yet only some progress. Loads of fillers in it, that doesn't contribute anything to the plot.I hope the author edits and paces their work properly in the future.

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At death's door and still bushing. 😂.......,...................Nice one author

yea

It's written and structured very badly. Things happening is very chaotic but not in a good way

thank god. I really like your writing but I couldn't care any less about one-piece especially with the Novel being IN MARVEL

Frusciante, legendary guitarist from Red Hot Chillie Peppers and River did drugs and river over dosed. It's quite controversial and many blame frusciante while many don't. At the end river wanted to do drugs and its also his responsibility for his life.

The author wants to portray MC as cool funny dude but he doesn't have that charm that gravitates around people like that. The conversations are also very...lame. Nothing wrong with it, a real person can say that. But the only girls who would find that amusing or funny would be...a girl in a redditor's head.Its like Meta Essence Gacha but without the MC's charm

Too much edge tbh. The tone of the chapters and characters sometimes don't match with each other.

This reads like the author wanted to create his own Butchered version of The Perfect Run.

mc logic - can only collect some so better collect nothing at all 💀💀💀💀

if we as normal everyday people can think about it why can't he. Why does he need something to happen first.Don't take need make him a gary stue but also don't need to make him oblivious to reality. Just own up to the forced dramatization.

still I like this work, dont't drop it. It's a pretty awesome fanfic even if too personally colourised sometimes.

aint reading all that. Happy for you tho author or sad about it.jokes aside, if I am being honest, its your work you can do anything with it. Just that some of the chapters come off as virtue signalling to me. So i just skipped those.

u sound bitter

The only thing I felt was the corniness. The revenge part I mean. Man is borderline and on the verge of crossing into insufferable. It's your novel tho.

Suffers from a major issue i like to CQS. China Quality Syndrome. Imagine a bad china webnovel. this is it, the horrible dialogue, the two brain cells, the personality of wood, the coolness of fire in mc, the charm of a blob fish. If any of you see the 5* review reader irl, run away. these guys are aliens

It's a work of pedo.phi.lia The author has some weird as fetish. probably some iindian discord mod pedo, speaking as an indian

again things like "that order". it goes very specific without revealing anything. normal conversations either you reveal some info or just don't say anything. Not some adult using teen girl conversation of asking each other. "hehe did u do THAT yet?" these are adults, make them talk like that

later she even says, she retired. see that interaction is a normal interaction. "told u million times to not call me that" she retired, might be someone in the same work as nat, shield, red room. we don't know but it tells us she special. instead of blatantly saying "ex-shield Leona" like some Wattpad story for cheap corny wow factor. use more natural interactions to reveal info