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This is only my view, but try to be less opinionated when writing reviews; 1* novels are typically COMPLETELY unreadable and have absolutely 0 redeeming qualities. Remember, try not to be an ass.

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    theanimemail12d
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    "The need for immediate gratification is strong with this one." - Sun Tzu

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    Wow, that was really awesome! The last couple of chaps felt slightly disappointing/rushed in execution, but this one definitely hit home (though, I did find the monologues a bit... intruding (only word I can think of to explain it) at times). Either way, thanks for the chap and being a good sport when it comes to my critical review of the series; I've seen many who simply delete lower star reviews. Looking forward to the next book :).

    Ch 306 CHAPTER 300(The Main Event)
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    MHA: Horizon (Ope-Ope No Mi)
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  • theanimemail
    theanimemail1mth
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    So, it's a pretty interesting story, but the author doesn't really understand how to use commas and positively refuses to use grammar checkers (e.g., Grammarly, Quilbot, etc.); this makes it so that pretty much every chapter has at least 1-2 spelling errors, way too many run-on sentences, and awkward-sounding dialogues as a result of the lack of commas and proper punctuation. Now, while I'm slightly annoyed that the author is willing to spend so much time writing and planning out a pretty good story but isn't willing to spend an extra 3-5 minutes to drastically improve the final product, I have to say that I've enjoyed the story. Law as a character improves as a person, the side characters don't feel too 1-dimensional, though I do think they could've used a lot more development, and the setting and MC's powers are interesting enough. Edit (CHAPTER 285 (Classroom Tension)): I think this needs to be stated as well: the author is pretty bad at bringing emotional scenes to life; they just tell us people are sad in the blandest ways possible, with little to no nuance or, well, weight, for a lack of a better term, behind the scenes (so, in summary, this is an issue of too much tell and too little show when it comes to character nuance and motivation). Overall, I'd give this a read but know that the above flaws are prevalent throughout the book and barely improve as the book progresses.

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    MHA: Horizon (Ope-Ope No Mi)
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    theanimemail2mth
    Replied to Raventan

    I mean, I guess? Though the MC doesn't really seem like he places that much importance stuff like power, social status, or anything really related. He also doesn't seem to have a temperament that is in line with trying to ascend higher.

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    The Immortal (twilight fanfiction)
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    theanimemail2mth
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    Hey, I'm thinking about starting this, but want someone's input: does this become creepy? Like, does the MC get into a relationship with an underage girl or something? I skimmed the titles and some reviews and there were a couple small red flags. Either way, thanks for the input in advance :).

    Ch 193 Chapter 193: Interlude
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    theanimemail2mth
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    section --> scene

    As I got to the far end of the village, I came to the village's church.
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    theanimemail2mth
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    this applies to most 2 sections in this chapter. Oh, and a couple others if you are counting other words.

    As I got to the far end of the village, I came to the village's church.
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  • theanimemail
    theanimemail2mth
    Commented

    thanks for the chapter :)!

    Ch 61 the village
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  • theanimemail
    theanimemail2mth
    Commented

    Suggestion: too many repeat words in too short a time (in this case village)

    As I got to the far end of the village, I came to the village's church.
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  • theanimemail
    theanimemail2mth
    Replied to TJ_Rose

    Thanks for pointing that out though *thumbs up*

    In one of his earlier journals, Adam wrote about his first meeting with the volturi, and how they tried to manipulate him, but he didn't go into great detail about it, or any possibility as to why he is different, and it doesn't work on him, just that it didn't, and his mind is shielded from mental abilities.
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    theanimemail2mth
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    Umm, alright? I wouldn't be surprised if I missed something; I've been listening to this through text-to-speech while working on homework, so my attention tends to wane a bit sometimes.

    In one of his earlier journals, Adam wrote about his first meeting with the volturi, and how they tried to manipulate him, but he didn't go into great detail about it, or any possibility as to why he is different, and it doesn't work on him, just that it didn't, and his mind is shielded from mental abilities.
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    The Immortal (twilight fanfiction)
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  • theanimemail
    theanimemail2mth
    Posted

    Copying my review from RR (Royal Road). Side comment before the meat of the review (seriously, this is over 1,600 words, so it definitely has some meat on its bones): How the hell does this currently only have the following stats?! Seriously, this needs some more love lol *nudge, nudge* *wink, wink*. TOTAL VIEWS: 11,899 AVERAGE VIEWS: 992 FOLLOWERS: 219 FAVORITES: 71 RATINGS: 77 PAGES : 261 General summary/TLDR version: So, I think this has to be one of the coolest stories I've read in quite a while: the side characters are being developed nicely, the main character doesn't lack depth, and the author has done one of the best jobs when it comes to personality integration I've pretty much seen in a book of this type. The grammar is almost impeccable, the style flows really well while not being overly flowery or as bland as drying paint, and finally, the story has so many interesting plot hooks that I've lost count. Some copied quotes from further along in the review: "So yeah, the author has great punctuation and pretty awesome grammar." "Either way, my point is this: don't come into this book thinking it's going to be a copy of DCC (Dungeon Crawler Carl) or any other type of dungeon crawler book; honestly, this has been one of the fresher takes I've seen in the whole "Stuck in Another World as a Reality TV Contestant" genre/trope." "Side note: the lewder scenes within the book are pretty well done and do a wonderful job of showcasing moments of character development while also giving us insight into a character's thought process and overall personality. So yeah, I have to say this is one of the few stories on here that I feel actually make good use of sexual intimacy, which has been a nice change of pace since most stories tend to just make the characters **** like action figures (not sure if I explained it correctly, but they basically just have the characters go at it with little to no subtlety or technique, while also generally lacking the aftercare moments that come with when the sex actually ends)." "So yeah, fingers crossed that this ends up being a decently long series with many exciting moments. Keep up the great writing, Spessgot, and I hope you continue writing far into the future." ________________________________________________________________ Style Section: Now, to preface this whole section, I would like to say that style is one of the main things that makes or breaks a book for me. I've seen many books with very interesting premises end up falling flat due to poor presentation; examples of this are extremely bland writing or overly flowery language, bland descriptions of a world or its characters, or simply awkward sentence structure and word choices. Those are some of the few ways I see many authors end up screwing up their work. This succeeds in pretty much every metric I tend to rate books on: The author's characters and world are decently described while also not feeling overly descriptive and tedious to read through; the world feels lived in and not like it revolves around the main character; the author has a decently verbose vocabulary, which keeps the story fresh; and the author has amazing pacing, with practically none of the scenes feeling overly drawn out or cut too short; even the transitions between chapters are ******* impeccable. Seriously, it blows my mind how many authors tend to neglect this specific aspect of a story, and given that the book is almost 270 pages long, I can say with relative confidence that the author will be able to firmly deliver on this aspect in future chapters. ________________________________________________________________ Story Section: Now, when it comes to story I feel this book has pretty much everything I could want: the main character is super likable while not feeling like a Gary Sue or author self-insert and generally just has a sense of depth to him, the author has done a great job of making the side characters each have different voices and perspectives (though we haven't really delved too deep into their lives yet, though it seems like we're getting there), the author manages to implement so many interesting story aspects that I could totally see being implemented in terrible ways (note: this is especially apparent with the DnD like system since I could see so many authors trying and failing to make this work within the Chinese martial arts genre), but he does it in a way that brings light to many of the best characteristics within the different genres and tropes he's exploring. Additionally, as briefly mentioned in the style section, the author has done a fantastic job when it comes to connecting plot points and not wasting a single chapter. Now, I want to make something related to this clear: this does not mean the author is incapable of slowing down the story in order to showcase character interaction and general world-building; in this book, the author does a fantastic job of interweaving moments of downtime along with general plot progression and action, which is something I've seen many authors on RoyalRoad and officially published authors have big issues with. Either way, this is already pretty long, so I'll end this section here since you get what I'm trying to say: the author has done a fantastic job in most aspects I'd rate a story by, which is something I've found to be pretty rare. Side note 1: The lewder scenes within the book are pretty well done and do a wonderful job of showcasing moments of character development while also giving us insight into a character's thought process and overall personality. So yeah, I have to say this is one of the few stories on here that I feel actually make good use of sexual intimacy, which has been a nice change of pace since most stories tend to just make the characters **** like action figures (not sure if I explained it correctly, but they basically just have the characters go at it with little to no subtlety or technique, while also generally lacking the aftercare moments that come with when the sex actually ends). Side note 2: While I originally went into this thinking it would be kind of like Dungeon Crawler Carl, or simply a bit of a rip-off of it, I was pleasantly surprised that, while initially having the same general feeling, it completely branches off and in its own direction. I'd honestly say that I enjoy this book way more than I did the original DCC, which is saying something because that was one of my favorite books when it first came out (book 2-3 becomes kinda meh though, IMO). Either way, my point is this: don't come into this book thinking it's going to be a copy of DCC or any other type of dungeon crawler book. Honestly, this has been one of the fresher takes I've seen in the whole "Stuck in Another World as a Reality TV Contestant" genre/trope. ________________________________________________________________ Character Section: Now, upon reflection, I feel like this is where the story is slightly lacking currently; given that this book is only around 250 to 260 pages in and is only just getting past what many would consider the tutorial and general world introduction, not many characters have been delved into or really expanded upon. So, while I do think each of the characters feels alive and each has their own voice, characters outside the MC tend to feel a little lacking in the death department, though this does seem to be changing at a rapid pace, especially with the introduction of the MC's first female companion. Side note: Though I am slightly concerned with the rate at which female characters might be introduced, and while this hasn't been an issue yet, I am worried that there will be a rapid influx of women into what many would consider the MC's harem. So far, there's only been one woman potentially added to his harem (unofficially, since they're only currently in a casually intimate relationship), but I could totally see this story being bogged down by the addition of way too many women. Nonetheless, the author has done really well so far, so I will put my face in his ability to pull off the harem genre in a way that is satisfying and at least slightly realistic. ________________________________________________________________ Grammar Section: Honestly, there's not much to talk about here: the grammar is pretty much spot on, with only the occasional repeat word or incorrect spelling (I've only seen this happen twice, I think), which is awesome for a web novel or even a published work. The author knows how to use more advanced grammar like the semi-colon and colon, as well as the more commonly used pieces of grammar like the comma and period; proper punctuation tends to be one of the many sore spots in both published and non-published works: when it comes to web novels, many authors have absolutely no idea how to use commas (or semicolons and colons for that matter, though that's more understandable), which has the side effect of making the author either use way too many periods and subsequently making the story feel stilted and boring to read, or using too many commas and accidentally making run-on sentences, which can make the reading experience very, very hectic and disjointed. So yeah, the author has great punctuation and pretty awesome grammar. ________________________________________________________________ Ending Notes/Thoughts Section: Note to author: I hope you end up sticking to writing this book since it's been an absolute blast getting caught up to the latest chapter. Oh, and when you go on hiatus, simply putting a notice in the author's note or within the comments goes a long way toward building trust with your readers. I've seen many readers go from absolutely loving a story and its author to outright despising them due to poor communication on both sides, so keep that in mind in the future (though keep in mind that it is ultimately just my opinion that this would be for the best). So yeah, fingers crossed that this ends up being a decently long series with many exciting moments. Keep up the great writing, Spessgot, and I hope you continue writing far into the future.

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    Play Test: Stuck in Another World as Reality TV Contestant
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  • theanimemail
    theanimemail2mth
    Replied to funny_lol

    I don't really get what you're trying to say, but it seems like most of those will likely be further explored once the MC travels to further out continents. Also, um, I don't think vampires and magic are synonymous with each other. Oh, and I don't think money can have that much of an effect on something as widespread as Catholicism and the many other religions based on the Bible. Side note: I have no idea what you're talking about when it comes to trying to become stronger; if he got any stronger than he already is, I could see him being way too OP for the story.

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    The Immortal (twilight fanfiction)
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    theanimemail2mth
    Posted

    So, I've now read past chapter 50, and I have to say that it's been pretty interesting to see the author improve their writing quality and general writing style. I'd recommend reading my previous review to understand my issues with all the chapters until around 50, but I have to say that, while I still see some issues with comma usage, the grammar as a whole VASTLY improves; the characters and world are also being further explored and given more depth, which is really exciting. Keep up the great work, Mr. Bean. *thumbs up*.

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    theanimemail2mth
    Commented

    dang, I'm all caught up. Well, now I got to go update my review a bit.

    Ch 59 a quick lesson then reveal
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    theanimemail2mth
    Commented

    Honesty, these last 5 or so chapter have been pretty awesome; it feels like the story has finally found its flow and generally read WAY better than prior to ch 50.

    Ch 58 attemted explanation and a battle of wit
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  • theanimemail
    theanimemail2mth
    Commented

    wow, really liked this one

    Ch 52 East
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    theanimemail2mth
    Commented

    Tip: I honestly wish there was more attention put the sensations the MC must have experienced while fighting in a battle of this scale. One of the big examples being that the guy must be absolutely covered in blood by the end of the battle, and it's sadly not even mentioned; adding more details with regards to the characters sensory experiences would go a long way to making many of the situations more immersive and lifelike (ex. the MC must feel exhausted, tired, hungry, dirty/grimy, etc.).

    If there are any problems please let me know.
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  • theanimemail
    theanimemail2mth
    Commented

    Huh, this was actually a pretty interesting tidbit.

    Julius likes to use the word, "barbarian" to describe the look I tend to take on. Let me explain, I have a bad habit of forgetting to cut my hair, and well it can get pretty long before it starts to become an annoyance to be where I then cut it.
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  • theanimemail
    theanimemail2mth
    Commented

    I'm surprised he remember so much about earth since it's been so many years. I'd have thought he'd have forgot about most of the 15-30 years he was on earth.

    Maybe thats why im so reluctant to use it, when you spend years learning something just to make one item, then you make it, then you practically fall in love with it, kinda like cars, you buy a nice fancy car for yourself, to drive, but it ends up as your most prized possession and it just ends up sitting in the garage as something to look at.
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