The Soldier Mage

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The story seems ok although a bit of editing and character development is needed. The abilities are interesting with the setting; however, there does need to be a bit more realism in parts particularly of the maturity and slip-ups of the protagonist. The fluctuation between intelligence and maturity to a sudden childlike actions needs to be explained or changed to give the story a full five stars. Continue working and refining the novel.

This is a good start to a game lit novel. Keep working on filling out the characters. The more they feel real the more the readers will get snagged into the story.

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i don't read but i will give you 5 stars, maybe i return when this novel have 100 or more chap, so then i will make my review.......................................caracteres

30 year old soldier reincarnated with 40+ int and yet acting like a child! get's bullied by 10 year old, get beaten up, gun's stolen yet do nothing about it.. in short MC is stupid!

Hey, author here. Thanks for the support so far guys, first time writing a book and it means a lot to me. I know I have some things I can improve on, update wise I can't match Qidian due to work and family stuff but for other things feel free to let me know, I welcome all criticism. I draw inspiration from a lot of sources, notably western fantasy and some eastern light novels. So expect it to be sort of a cross between them. I opted to forego the usual system AI present in these type of stories to allow the reader to feel in the same level at the MC. Future plot wise I am not planning to have a stereotypical harem type deal going on, I find it too corny. There will however be some romance, I'll try and get my wife to help with that haha.

This story is quite new, but it is also quite promising with good character development. The pace is felt just right, neither too fast or too slow. Even at chapter 12, there are still enough plot hinting for future big fishes.

Really can't say alot yet as it has only been 12 chapters as of now. However, I am really enjoying the story so far and hope the author continues with it. The story has done a good job making me anticipate the next chapter with it's interesting mc, as well as the awesome creation power the mc has. Keep it up author and I will keep giving my power stones!

Really good I read everything in one setting, hope you keep righting this story. 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 140 1140 140 140 140

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This chapter keeps getting better and better I can’t stop reading it so please write the next chapters soon so I’ll be able to read it soon and don’t stop writing this book it’s really good

This chapter keeps getting better and better I can’t wait tell you write the next chapter so I can read it soon and please keep writing this book so I’ll be able to read it soon

Novel muito boa. Embora o MC fosse usar um pouco mais o cérebro, perceberia que ele já poderia ter dominado o mundo, kkk. A história é interessante, autor poderia usar mais a parte de criação dos objetos.

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30 year old soldier reincarnated with 40+ int and yet acting like a child! get's bullied by 10 year old, get beaten up, gun's stolen yet do nothing about it.. in short MC is stupid!