Steampunk Apocalypse!

Of course I'm giving myself five stars. I would say this is the best story ever written, but this is the 2nd novel I've started. So I suppose we will say it tied for first place with my other novel! Haha, in all seriousness please leave reviews with your thoughts guys! Thanks!

Not enough world back ground I feel like this is a mix of full metal alchemist world with the seven deadly sins homunculus but there called the seven nightmares. .... many stolen names and ideas from other famous creators shows that you could have just made up yourself to save the trouble. Literally have one punch man written word for word in your novel bro that’s just plain stealing. Forced plot of moving from one organization to another to fast no consistent power scaling literally everyone is at the same power level. Trash mc being put through so much stressed to further your plot cause you don’t know how to write a story just about him. Too many full metal alchemist rip offs what was the point of having all his arms and legs ripped off bro do you know what phantom limb pain does to you I don’t care how strong. A rapper is you should be going through something when you forcibly get your limb cut off. Dad forced to die Cause no one orginization can keep him safe for long. My advice to you is stop stealing sit down for a second and make your own story bro cause I’ve read it somewhere else

The story made me read it fast because it keeps on adding my curiosity. So I didn't bother looking for grammar and spelling errors. Stability of updates: excellent. 5 CH now in a period of 5-6 days? Story development: the MC just started to develop his abilities, couldn't say more since it's only starting. Character design: like what some people on the comment said, mc is somehow like deku. A bullied kid>got powers>his bully came with him on the academy>they will become enemies. Fun Prediction: they're going to be friends in the future? 😊😂 I still like the MC tho, got a good impression of him. I like that he's into inventing. The vibes he gave me is kinda like deku of hero academia/ a bit Dean of dark king / and a bit Edward elric? World background: the world after apocalypse + steam punk era. Deserves 5/5 for me. Suggestions? No suggestions haha. Just keep doing this and don't drop it if possible. ✔️Added in my library

Wonderful novel: definitely my new top original. I love the steampunk ideas and themes. I am glad you did not drop it after the contest: keep writing pls. I like the OP MC and his goals. His abilities are srsly ridiculous. The factions in the wotld are messed up: like nearly everyone is cruel. But its the apocalypse so I guess thats ok. Mc seems to hold up ok after going through terrible situations. I do wish he would lay low for some time and build up his power. Like why does he always keep trying to join/start a faction. He could wander for a while. And maybe even stockpile weapons in a hidden warehouse with his abilities.

Nothing too adventurous, since a lot of the themes are very familiar, but the writing quality is better than most. Sadly the plot development and writing style is quite immature, often childish, lacking descriptions in some places, and thrusting the reader too quickly into new events and new characters with almost zero build-up in others. Even then it was ok until plagiarized characters started turning up in the story, totally ruining it. I do enjoy a cheeky little homage, with a little wink wink nudge nudge here and there, but bringing it up more than once is obnoxious. Just have your moment and move on, let the reader at least pretend you didn't steal a character, other-wise just tag it as fan-fiction so those of us expecting some originality can bypass it. Blatant plagiarism totally ruins a story for me, and I just can deal with it. Just don't do it, guys. Just don't.

Read it until chapter 20 and i can only say that the mc is dumb and weak. He has such a strong power buy he doesnt use it to its full potential. Its like the author likes to make his mc suffer and undermine him. I'd rather have Dupe as the mc or even Jake, thousands of times better than a typical xianxia-like villain character which the mc has.

I'm kind of disappointed in this novel. As one of the reviewers have Said, if you like the hero academia, you may like this one but sadly this is really not my cup of tea. And srsly, giving the MC's opponent a tragic back story when in the early chapters you made him so bad to the core? Dmn I really hate that part.

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Man, let me tell you something man, let me tell you something man! Snoozy is a phenomenal writer! This is his first book so some people didn’t like the beginning by the way he has grown and progressed with his story telling and world building, they way the Ed our MC has developed its simply mind blowing! There is development of the Ed’s character, mentality and ambition; as well as his powers. The research done into other cultures as well with the combination of western and eastern concepts along with the authors own ideas, they form this expertly crafted story! I don’t want to spoil anything but all I can say is our MC has neutral mindset maybe chaotic neutral mean he will help others but he also will see through his goals and ambitions if it means ignoring someone’s plight, using others or putting himself in harms way. Ed is really OP he’s above average at best where we stand but he’s unmatched in his ability to plot and see plans coming to fruition. The best thing you can do is add this to your library and just read it yourself, don’t take my opinion on anything other than stick through the beginning as this was his first work! He has another book as well that people love I haven’t read it yet but I will, even with it being on hiatus and him wanting to rework it, because he is just that good at drawing you In and i would love to see how he developed with that one as well as when he reworks it how he mad it that much better. I guess I kinda review both but he is great and the story is great! You still reading this? Why?! You should be reading the story at this point! Can’t Wait to see you in the comments of the newer chapter leave me reply to my comments and let me know if I got you started lol

Well. At first, Im actually read this cuz im bored and have nothing to do. But suddenly I found myself binge reading this entire day and night So you can suppose that I am like this story. The thing is, when I'm read this novel suddenly I am remember about code geass. Dunno why. Cuz the mc maybe. Or smthg I just hope this not end like code geass tho Please 😂 pretty please? And make the mc more of with more mutants flesh. Till no hint of humanity in him Even tho I dunno if he still have that Ehhhh I'm writing a long review hmmm Meh Whatever - Keep. Up the good work lad And became slave to the readers! HAHAHA

Been ignoring this novel in the past 'cause I taught the story is a generic one. But because of desperation cause I ran out of things to read I finally gave in and tried it.....Didn't know it was this good!!!....definitely recommended to those that haven't read this

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Well written post-apocalypse esper vs aliens story. Mc rises from the despair and pain for revenge and power to control his fate. His esper ability to transfigure materials in the steampunk era mixes technology and science fiction is great creativity and not totally illogical random fantasy adds realism that you can immerse in. One of the best stories out that beat mainstream novels hands down.

At first, it was choppy and fast, not a lot about his personality was explained. I really like having a sort of evil protagonist. I'm sad to see this become premium since I'm a free reader and am already spending on two other novels, but one of them finishing, so maybe I'll focus on this. I'm happy for the author though, since they get to make that dough. I wish I knew more about the nightmares and how the apocalypse occurred. I like the character depth of some, and how cliche free this is compared to others. I'm not very good at reviewing books.... Overall, very naisu!!!!

Nothing like a mad scientist with some good allies and some plot armor but for a greater good! The beginning (15+chapters) is of a lower quality but keep going, you will be pleased, great world and a good mc await you, and when I say a good mc, is the quality because here when have a anti hero done wright!

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Good.

I like the way author develop character. MC childish and naïve mindset tempered by world setting. This is not a story of righteousness. This is a story about MC journey to accomplish what he want. Everything explained rationally. Inspirational story.