Reborn in DxD world with a Fate System

I take back my review,it's dissapointing story.Because autor just need's to go with shounen/cultivation sh*t logic.Well you know,those kinda of logic that you will feel bad to hear.Let me give you examples. Apparently most op dragons in multiverse is elemental dragon empress,who can control all five elements.....Cool right?Though,in original story,we have top dragons with conceptual powers like dreams and infinity,and sh*tty fire and ice is better....inhale,,,,exhale...boiiii, Okay,let's brush it off for now... For readers entertaiment and building up hype for future battles,we nerf mc like twice in a day.Without joke,rine-sharingan,even if im not fan of naruto eyes,apparently -trash......Yeah. What's not thrash is cultivation and see people weak points,because you know,eyes of death perception,who can kill shinso vampire,who born from dead god's blood and flesh-is trash too.....BOIII.. Ofcourse we all understand that this is just for the sake of plot progression and entertaiment...so let's not take it close to a heart,right? In my previous reivew,Im point out nicely,that revealing jason secrets,make huge plotholes and even worse logic seems to screams for me from the grave,that autor put down her.But,oh well.... Apparently,guy born from two apex existance is trash without help of others and his cheats.....BOIIII... And now 12 years(or I don't give a F*CK) kid who descendant of king arthur,beats down our hero who train and bleed for 12 years of his life,not only in swords,OH NOOO,but in a raw power.A DRAGON,A DEMON AND HERO,GOT TRASHED AROUND BY OTHER HERO DESCENDANT FOR PLOT SAKE AND MAKING FRIENDS.......if you don't know what to writte in future and just slow down story pace to this almost filler like sh*t chapters and even more TO THIS LEVEL OF ABSURDITY,maybe just maybe,you need some insipiration for future plot,because right now,it's no more than a joke.Peace out.

Extremely disappointed. The concept is good, but the execution is lacking. The laziness of the dialogue is what really set me off... Seriously, don't use stage dialogue, not only does it break the immersion of the story; it also hinders your growth as a writer. You don't learn any dialogue cues and all around; you miss out on the foundations of a good novel.

Author here to tell you that I'm going to delete every trash review that it is given to lower the stars of the novel. If you are going to write a bad review y would like to why. I don't want to see more bul**** like EXP EXP EXP EXP and a 1 star review.

The MC is the son of two extremely powerful beings and has two types of bloodlines, both of them are top-notch even in God Realm. Even with that, the MC can’t be stronger than a person that began training after him, a human that is ‘slightly’ stronger than him, even with him evolving his bloodlines. Conclusion: The Author keeps making him weaker than someone just because he wants, the MC is a total disappointment in any aspects, the Author keep making some paragraphs that say things like “Now I’m so strong that x can’t beat me” then, he make him lose to a KID with 11 year old that surprisingly is stronger than him. If you are like me, that is patient to read that many chapters, despite the huge disappointment, go ahead. If no, don’t even read.

Well, this is my opinion The mc is extremely nerfed constantly to the point of being defeated by a human. He is supposed to have the heart / soul of Ashura, which are basically incarnations of war, master of combat, and he doesn't even know how to fight straight yet !!! And even though he's from the upper realm with insanely powerful parents, he evolves slower than the xianxia-cultivated novel characters. Dialogues have no emotion,are emotionless, they are simply text, they pass nothing. It still pisses me off that he saves Kuroka and asks Shirone to become Rias's servant, and she has even more potential than Kuroka herself. Another annoying fact is that mc should always interact with the gremory family, never another, always them, this is cliche to the max, another cliche is he always interact with one of the 3 factions, he could simply get closer to the Shinto faction or even the Hindu, the fact that he became Azazel's foster child literally "destroyed" the story for me. Not to mention that mc doesn't evolve into anything, emotionally, physically, or anything, it's still the same. History has evolved almost nothing in all of these chapters. And as hell a dragon lineage of ice and fire has more potential power than dragons that can duplicate and divide power infinitely, others that are conceptual beings like dream and infinity. Even if the novel has concepts of cultivation, its having power based on ice and fire is nowhere near these other dragons, Maybe that's why he's so weak compared to other dragons., it remains weak even though it is from a divine realm. Now about grammar I can not give much opinion, English is not my first language and I am not fluent in it. Although I find some grammatical errors I still find the story very readable. The refresh rate was also good so far, that the romance is stalled. But in short away, if you like a story Little elaborate and without compromise or plot building and character growth, read this story, otherwise not.

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Mc to weak for **** sake nurfed much?ben traning for many years but he got defeat hes even a dragon wtf? He can only be strong as a dragon form and not his real body yeah men nice thinking to disappoint ed in this novel

Here 5 stars shameless author, this fanfic is for improve my writting but i´m to take it serious also. If you like my Fanfic hope you go a take a look to my other novel: Reincarnated with a beauty summoning system.

I Hope you don’t drop This Fate fanfic because WE NEED MORE🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩👍👍👍👍👍👍😝😝😝😝😝😝They just don’t make them like they used to.😤😤😤😤😤😤😤😫😫😫😫😫😫😖😖😖😖😖😖

I like the concept but idiot mc and forced plot makes it hard to like it. On a side note I really enjoyed the comments...........................................

Too forced. Too much bullshit. Bad grammar. The mc is stupid as fvck You have to endure phisical pain to read this shit. Fuck this shit I'm out. imma just grab ma stuff and leave

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A light reading that entertains you without falling into the realm of being stupid. The reasoning un the novel can use some improvement, i think there is not much understanding in deeper zones like the heart of a woman and politics. Improving this would give much more debt to the novel. Dialogues can improve, the Quality of this dialogues defile the intellect of the characters. Overall a very good story with a lot of good features like the effort to create something original and not relly only on the DxD and fate world. Worth trying, it may not be Your cup of tea but i Will entertain you I hope author sees this. As I see on him a desire to improve. I recommend reading other novels and learn from real world history. My personal advice would he: Kingdom's bloodline

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It's a really great story, there's not a lot of story of fate series system so I'm really excited about it. Please don't drop the novel suddenly at least give us a warning first before dropping it, thank you. .........................................................................................

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I love this novel. I want to see the new world soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 140 characters is a piece of **** so I have to write this fucking line.