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FabriiMR
FabriiMRLv135yr
2019-07-03 10:09

A light reading that entertains you without falling into the realm of being stupid. The reasoning un the novel can use some improvement, i think there is not much understanding in deeper zones like the heart of a woman and politics. Improving this would give much more debt to the novel. Dialogues can improve, the Quality of this dialogues defile the intellect of the characters. Overall a very good story with a lot of good features like the effort to create something original and not relly only on the DxD and fate world. Worth trying, it may not be Your cup of tea but i Will entertain you I hope author sees this. As I see on him a desire to improve. I recommend reading other novels and learn from real world history. My personal advice would he: Kingdom's bloodline

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GreatSage_Master1
GreatSage_Master1Author

OMG! It has been a while since I get a comment like this, a real review. Thank you very much!! Thank you for your advices, I will try to improve my dialogues (It´s a little dificult to make dialogues with a caracter that was created by other person). The heart of the woman: I´m going to writte differents POV of the girls and other characters so the people can understand better their feelings and character. Kingdom´s bloodline: I had already add it on my Library a while ago but I haven´t got time to read it, I think I´m going to start it soon. Thank you really much for this review!!

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