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Predaotr
PredaotrLv511mth
2023-11-23 07:52

Other than author forcing plot to stay as close to original as possible which should be impossible (by dumbing down MC for example) its quite nice HP fanfic

Harry Potter: Grindelwald's Grandson

NyanTa
4.6
87 Chs

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NyanTa
NyanTaAuthor

I actually spend a lot of time making sure Alaric follows a logical way of thinking, and doesn't figure out things out of nowhere, so would you mind pointing out the times when you think I dumbed him down? :)

11mth
Predaotr
PredaotrLv5

how about the fact that he saw in first year "magical rat" leaking out magical whispers that are the same as when they transform into animagus form and proceeds to completely ignore it - i assume till now as it's 3rd year and prisoner of azkaban time? he even said that no rat even with magical enchantments would live 12 years. Other thing that forces plot would be Harry reaction to dementors - in OG he reacts with fainting because of his live with Dursleys and lack of love/happy memories. Now he have plenty of those, so reaction shouldn't be as extreme

NyanTa:I actually spend a lot of time making sure Alaric follows a logical way of thinking, and doesn't figure out things out of nowhere, so would you mind pointing out the times when you think I dumbed him down? :)
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Vanille2010
Vanille2010Lv14

It really seems like a promising story. I also really like the fact that while not necessarily hating muggle, the mc isn't too fond of them either. As of now, it looks well balanced. So good job and continue your good work.

1yr

JuliflylikeanANGEL
JuliflylikeanANGELLv4

OMG. This story is truly magnificent, the language is written fluently and the character design is also top notch. I haven’t read any HP fic before, that just fulfills every good aspect of a story while also giving characters deepness. It feels as if the author is a professional writer, his writing style is just so good. I hope he keeps updating as fast as usually, cause I can’ t get enough of the story.

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NyanTa
NyanTaAuthor

=Review as of Chapter 72= Writing quality: I've got some writing experience, mainly from contests I entered as a hobby, so my story has, at least, comprehensible sentence structure and good grammar (There will always be one or two mistakes once in a while, but I usually correct them as soon as a reader points them out). I tried to adapt my writing style to the web novel format, so the earlier chapters are a mix of various styles I tried to implement (Even first-person POV). Despite that, I'm proud to say that I've found a style I'm comfortable writing with, and plan to re-write the earlier twenty or so chapters when I have the time. Stability of Updates: I'm a uni student, so there are weeks where I really don't find the time to write, but otherwise, I release at least four chapters a week, with a minimum of 2000 words per chapter. If I find myself with more free time, the chance of more chapters coming out is quite high. Story Development: I can't say much on this topic without making this review a spoiler, which is not my intention. As of now, I'm currently writing the Third-Year, and considering this is a Small AU, the canon plot has gone haywire a long time ago, although some key elements will remain. Character Design: If you've come here with the intention of reading about a Gary Stu story, then don't waste your time. The main character and his sister (who I consider a sub-main character of sorts) are strong compared to their peers but are still nowhere near the level of powerful wizards. If there's one thing that I could write about forever, is the struggles characters face in order to achieve their objectives, so, again, if you want to read about an extremely overpowered character, don't bother. World Background: There isn't much to say here, only that I add certain parts to the Wizarding World that compliment its original setting, and that I try to cover certain small plot holes not addressed in the books. *Extra* Romance: No-Harem :D (But there's more than one FML).

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r3w
r3wLv12

A good story where the MC is a native and acts like one. Lots of promise. Looking forward to what comes next![img=update][img=update][img=update]

1yr
llewis1954
llewis1954Lv13

Decent story up until the potters are still alive which is a huge part of Harry Potter that really took me out of this FF

1yr
streiz
streizLv13

This novel is really fascinating , and I must say, it has truly captivated my imagination. The premise revolves around an original character who transmigrates into the body of none other than Grindelwald's grandson. It's an intriguing concept that instantly piqued my interest. One of the aspects I particularly enjoy about this story is the potential for character development. Witnessing the protagonist navigate his complex situation, adapting to his new identity and the challenges it brings, adds layers of depth to the narrative. Exploring the intricate web of relationships within the Harry Potter universe through a fresh perspective is truly refreshing. However, I must admit that the story does have its drawbacks. The main issue for me lies in the lack of chapters and the slow updates. As an ardent fan of the story, it can be a bit frustrating to eagerly await new chapters, hoping to immerse myself further in this captivating world. Nevertheless, the quality of the writing and the author's dedication to the narrative keep me invested, despite the occasional wait. And lastly, I have an immense fondness for the idea of Fleur Delacour being the love interest of the protagonist in this story. The allure of her character, with her grace, beauty, and enchanting presence, captivates me. I envision a potential romance between Alaric and Fleur that would be filled with undeniable chemistry, tender moments, and a profound connection.

1yr
iLeech
iLeechLv4

This Fanfic was a very pleasant surprise. I came in with low expectations, expecting another Fanfic that can't tell canon from fanon, but my apprehension proved to be pointless. Keep up the hard work. Finding a good HP FF is almost impossible, here or elsewhere.

1yr
NyanTa
NyanTaAuthor

Shameless 5 star review. If you have any suggestion you wish to see in the story, leave them on the comments below this post

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Mystical_Z
Mystical_ZLv10

is the sister the love instrest? ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

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Juan_Abud
Juan_AbudLv11

Yesssir keep it going!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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