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2023-05-23 23:04

Decent story up until the potters are still alive which is a huge part of Harry Potter that really took me out of this FF

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=Review as of Chapter 72= Writing quality: I've got some writing experience, mainly from contests I entered as a hobby, so my story has, at least, comprehensible sentence structure and good grammar (There will always be one or two mistakes once in a while, but I usually correct them as soon as a reader points them out). I tried to adapt my writing style to the web novel format, so the earlier chapters are a mix of various styles I tried to implement (Even first-person POV). Despite that, I'm proud to say that I've found a style I'm comfortable writing with, and plan to re-write the earlier twenty or so chapters when I have the time. Stability of Updates: I'm a uni student, so there are weeks where I really don't find the time to write, but otherwise, I release at least four chapters a week, with a minimum of 2000 words per chapter. If I find myself with more free time, the chance of more chapters coming out is quite high. Story Development: I can't say much on this topic without making this review a spoiler, which is not my intention. As of now, I'm currently writing the Third-Year, and considering this is a Small AU, the canon plot has gone haywire a long time ago, although some key elements will remain. Character Design: If you've come here with the intention of reading about a Gary Stu story, then don't waste your time. The main character and his sister (who I consider a sub-main character of sorts) are strong compared to their peers but are still nowhere near the level of powerful wizards. If there's one thing that I could write about forever, is the struggles characters face in order to achieve their objectives, so, again, if you want to read about an extremely overpowered character, don't bother. World Background: There isn't much to say here, only that I add certain parts to the Wizarding World that compliment its original setting, and that I try to cover certain small plot holes not addressed in the books. *Extra* Romance: No-Harem :D (But there's more than one FML).

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