i keep forgetting that it was set in the 14th century and did bane just suddenly age whole 9 years in a few days? or did i get it wrong ?

its just like how i wrote itakira_keia greenish pfp

discord name.. akira_kei

hey buddy, I've added you on discord. it is the same name as my author's name. I'd like it if we could continue to support each other and grow

Your chapters contain a lot of heavy words (which is good) but at times it gets confusing. like most of the time it is Her mother, which i guessed should be His mother. Then you mentioned Lucius's late mother... but i thought he was Bane's biological older brother. also it lacks fluency.. like the events are jumping from one scene to another. if anything.. it is alright if you do not use heavy words, just make sure it doesn't lose consistency

Thanks for your honest reviews. I'll try and make the metaphors more understandable. Also more emotional scenes will be added. i hope you keep hanging on for the later chapters, buddy.

The author here trying my hardest, (rating is done randomly) i want to recommend everyone reading my book (of course because i love my own book and i want more people to see.) i know in the first few chapters the MC might look like he cares a bit too much about his sister but it is a main motive to drive him into the world. if it feels a bit too obvious or repetitive I'll try and eventually broaden his motives (please keep hanging on, this thing gets better.). I'm sure it won't feel boring since it is a huge mesh of genres. I hope more people to come and leave a review. it'll help my understanding about what the readers want. I'm also open for criticism and ideas.

As a fellow author i can say that the author put a lot of thoughts behind this story. it was weaved very carefully which is a good sign. keep up the good work buddy, it has potential

I don't want to spoil .. but yes... it has a little hint on their personality

I'll follow the tradition like most authors. I'll leave the actual ratings to my readers. My story follows dark empathy so i believe it won't be boring at all. And yeah.. it may be challenging to some readers since my story keeps changing perspectives continuously.. but watching a story unveil from only one perspective would be boring, wont't you agree? In any case.. I'd love it if y'all just give it a try.