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Wow! Just wow! Very well written and interesting story. The world building is fascinating and really well done... You are updating daily and also the story has a really great flow. I like how the realms and various races that inhabit them interact, I still don't know how you will make it work as it seems pretty difficult to me allready, but I have great expectation for this novel. Keep up the good work. [img=update][img=update][img=update]
A very good start! Well, I must say I'm not a fan of female lead but this is some good novel. Unexpected devlopment and interesting character growth... But I have to say you should be careful around the consequences of Julia's action. She killed a person without a care in the world, but she didn't really took care of the aftermath. Rimember that anyway you see it, she is the primary suspect for the murder... Anyway keep it up it is really intriguing. [img=update][img=update][img=update]
A really interesting plot it's a shame for the Writing quality, there are tons of typos and errors, also the punctuation is a mess. The story has lot of potential and a unique plot but you really need to improve the writing quality. Like this it's not entertraining. I would love to read it with an improved English. Work hard Mr. author, you have all the right credentials to write something incredible.
Nice story until now, the author manmaged to place the groundwork of the story, but I have to tell you that you have to improve your English. There are some typos but that's not the problem, the problem is the very difficult to follow flow of the writing style and the many repetitions that make the read much heavier and boring. The world building and character design are very well made until now, great expectations. I hope you improve your writing that would make the novel that much better and fun to read. Keep it up, I'll keep it in sight.
Wow innovative world building, good English and nice starting plot. The only thing that left me confused is the weakness of the MC's mentality and lifestyle, you said he was ever kind with everyone but then he suddenly change his mind entirely just because he was murder? I felt like it was to sharp of a change and I know he had no choice since it was the only way he could live his second life but meh... I don't know it just feel wrong and a little forced. Anyway is interesting a soli 8,5 out of 10.
Very interesting, a refreshing world building. Your writing is good you only need to focus on the punctuation a little more ( I don't know sometimes I fell sometghing missing) other than that your descriptions are amazing. Good character design and love the plot for now... a solid 8 out of 10 I say.
I'm not a fan of apocalyctic scenario, but this is damn good. I love the disparity between the number of heroees and of anti-heroes, the world building is interesting I hope it will continue on this path. The plot really is both refreshing and stable. I say this story is promising. The only fault I can find is the in the writing quality since I personally find it a little heavy and a bit difficult to follow. That said I'll keep my eyes on you Mr. Mitsuishi, make this story shine and don't ignore it's potential.
Thanks for the honesty, really. I was already thinking of slowing the pace down, as a matter of fact it is the biggest problem I'm having right now. I'm going to slow down and give more details and everything, I was even thinking of adding another auxilary chapter to explain something I missed about the world building and magic concept. Shall I do it in your opinion?