Jagriti_Mandal
I'm a young author. (Chikki and Kari, The golden tears) Instagram: author_jagriti2009.
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Ohk,thank you for your advices.
Once there were three girls. They were best friends. One of them was intelligent and very helpful to others. She lived in singapore and had come to Paris because of her studies. Her name was Melanie. The second one was very good in sports. She was very clever. She helped others in their difficulties. She was from USA and had come to Paris because of her mother's transfer. Her name was Emmaline. The last but not the least , Felicia .She lived in Paris from a long time. She was extraordinary. She was a a black belt in karate 🥋. She scored the most in her grade 💯. She was an expert in all the things. She helped others to achieve their goal. They all met on a winter day on 21st June 2009. Melanie was going to shop for buying some groceries. She went inside and went straight to counter 1. She got the flour and butter there. A little later, she had all the items in the list so she went to the take the bill. She stood in the line for about 15 minutes. She was patient but a woman pushed her to come first. She got very angry 😡😡. She asked her , - Jagriti_Mandal3yrRépondu à Raymundo_Dobson
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- Jagriti_Mandal3yrPosté
I wish I could give negative review but I couldn't,so I gave you 1 star.Your story has no mature content.You have written about how the world is formed,may I ask,how do you know,how the world is formed?.Technically,you have written something wrong,something imaginary. I don't mean that writing imaginary is wrong but writing on a real topic is completely wrong.You have plenty grammar mistakes.Your content is less,mistakes are more.Ha,first correct your english then become an author.
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- Jagriti_Mandal3yrCommenté
I liked it but there's a lot of things you can improve at.If you improve at those points I will star your story and you will receive a good collection.Don't get me wrong but in the first chapter like you wrote,"God said ok".Fonts shouldn't be written like that.Hiffens to be used and repetitions to not be included since it's a story and not a poem.Expecting more from you.Really liked your idea of imagining things like these.Great work.Keep it up.Also check out my stories for more inspiration.I have wrote 3 stories.Thank you.
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