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Waifu Gacha System (On Hold)

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An unfortunate young man died in his sleep. Due to the unlucky nature of his death, the god of reincarnation gave him a second chance. After 16 years in his new world he is given the main character's exclusive privilege; A system. A.N. 1. This is my first Fan-Fic, don't expect it to be perfect 2. Any critisism is welcomed, under the condition that it is constructive and not random insults 3. I own almost no character (at this moment). 4. I am aware the sypnosis is unrefined, I didn't want a small all the details here, all of it will be in the prologue. 5. This is a wish-fufilment fan-fic, women will be laid and annoying bastards will be killed. 6. The main point of this novel is the smut aspect. Action takes a backseat.

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Yuri_is_Ntr
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Look, now I read all chapters and could give a full opinion on this novel. Yeah it's dropped in the score from my first attempt. Problems like I pointed out before not getting any better. Pacing and characters that act as not how they would act, is still same. I don't know if that's an actual problem because I do like big harems. But if character don't act as they supposed to act, is it truly what readers wants? I mean, we come here for girls that we already know, but they don't have same personality only looks and some parts. That's all. Character of mc is just unbearable. And if you see what kind of anime author actually used, he's luckluster in brain department become even more obvious. Is it truly Adam? No, he is not the same badass that you know from ragnarok manga. He is just some dude, that apparently think that luck is a most powerful thing in the world. He have nerfed version of his ability , he doesn't train. And he doesn't work for anything in his life. Author just give him girls. And about his abilities and world background. Author add dxd, but I don't think he actually read light novel. He doesn't seem to understand how strong people he add, and how problematic they are for a future. And it's really weird, 3 factions that have people who could easily obliterate whole countries, sided with Japan...how this supposed to work? It's totally unbelievable and useless for them. They have underworld /heaven, they don't need to fear American heroes. And knowing all this , this opportunistic guys have guts to add all his points in luck and never bother with strength and agility. In the world where trihexa could destroy world... That's beyond me. Like I could get that you main priority is romance part of the story. But you not even trying. You create whole arc when Adam get himself captured by humans and need to rely on his women's. But you keep talking that he is not a useless leach that hide behind his girls back... And under all circumstances, you never actually showed how strong he is. Let me remind you , Zeus from ragnarok that get him, and Zeus from dxd is two different gods. And approximately Zeus from dxd would be on par with hades, which was on the 10 strongest creature list under number 8. And someone like great red which was ultimate in power and not even count in 10 strongest list was slained in a future. ... I just doesn't know what to think. Is it good? It's frustrating. All those stuff add up and repeated constantly. So take my word, you will see it even if you try to not think much about it. It's will get in to you skin like a worm and wriggle you soul soon enough. But hey, author say that he gonna show mc true strength soon enough...just like he say, that mc wouldn't be weak fry but we could believe in it right? P. S. Arc in a prison was infuriating.

Konrad_The_Fourth
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Photosphere
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This one got me conflicted, smut but good... MC got reincarnated into some crossover world where the base is MHA, so far there is MHA, DXD, Nisekoi and MCU. He has the body and mind of Adam from Record of Ragnarok and some very convenient powers as well as the best thing of the novel, A system that allows him to summon waifus to the world for the uncultured. Writing Quality: Good, nigh-perfect English, the only thing I complain about is delivery. Stability of Updates: Can't say much here as I sadly caught up in a Hiatus, hope it is not dropped. Story Development: Very well done plot for a Smut novel that usually doesn't have fk all. Character Design: Great character design, the girls are very loyal to their original personalities. World Background: Many interesting locations however proper scenario description is lacking in most scenes (Characters' position, weather, furniture etc...) Now comes my personal opinion and I shall judge it in a Smut POV. I like the development of the relationships with the girls but you make a lot of sexual tension between to make a very average lemon scene. Usually, it is the other way around, authors make great lemons but leave the development aside. MC barely shows emotions, there are too few dialogues in some occasions where the scene could've been more meaningful, for example, Tsunade and Rias' scenes however I can't really blame you for that since the whole thing is Smut. Sadly, the girls are treated as objects to some extent, they don't have any life aside from Fking MC and watching TV except for a few ones. Sometimes the harem is so big that some girls aren't recalled often. I love the diversity in the harem, every single character is a remarkable woman/girl. In my humble opinion, I believe you should continue developing the girl's characters but more in a spiritual way. Make them useful, give them occupations, that way you don't have to put all of them on a screen all the time. The girls are literally fked silly, and none of them is a weakling, and even if they were somehow ambushed, MC can protect them with the help of the system. So why not make them go their way and involve them in that world's society? Some of them could work part-time in stores (mikasa, ning'er, meiko, yumeko, eve, kurumi, marika etc...), some of them could be teachers (Vados, LD, Grayfia, Gray) some of them could be trainers (Tsunade, Albedo) some could be office workers (Mamako, Raikou, Mitsuki), or they could be maids, Natasha can keep working as a spy there are a lot of scenarios that you could use not only to make smut but also to develop the relationships with the girls other than just fking. Rias should still have her peerage Come on man you have a crossover with worlds that don't lack events and possibilities, you can do better. Greetings.

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