Envision
Author here! My review score accurately reflects my feeling on my story. If you like deep world building, strong character designs, clear character growth, and a completely flushed out plot you have come to the right story. The proof I can give you is the first two chapters are the ending point for volume 1. With a clear end point in place all that there is to do is fill in the blanks. I will also be frank. My grammar and spelling can be rough. I hope you will look past it and try to just enjoy the story. The book may start out slow but it will pick up in pace later on. There is a lot of background to build and a lot of moving pieces to generate and tie together. The story will continue forward to get to the tournament as I release chapters. However, there will also be plenty of flashbacks / cut scenes to flush out the story arcs dealing with James's parents, the lab, and the organization known as Black Death. I am a fan of video games and mysteries and I want to tie the two genres together in one place. Please be patient and enjoy my story. The chapter word count I am targeting is between 1,500 at the lowest to 3,500 at the highest. Ideally it will be closer to 2,000 words per chapter. The only reasons why a chapter's length would be around the 1,500 count is if I have to split a super long chapter in half or I get too busy on the weekend. I look forward to your input and comments!
Great story so far I like how you describe the beginning, like we were watching the begining of Like a movie or something, you do really good on showing how the character feels and acts, the only mistakes I can see are some minor spelling ones, so keep up the hard work and I hope to reed more of this!
I don't know about other people but I had a bit of a hard time following at the beginning but I attribute that more to myself then your writing. Your description was vivid but dialog made me question weather an actual gamer would talk the way you wrote. Your style made it seem like they treated the game like the real world to much. Overall it was a decent read
So, I am interested in the kind of stories that take place in a video game, and most of them usually do make for interesting stories. The worldbuilding in this book is exactly how I imagine worldbuilding in MMORPGs. The main protagonist is likable, the characters are well-developed, and the way the story flows and moves is addictive and charming to read. This is a great book!