Not a bad story. I enjoyed most of the parts and the pacing was okay. Some sentences could be better with and edit and maybe proofreading can help too. Overall, not a bad read, and hopefully the author would improve it.
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LIKEI love to see creative criticism like this. It allows me to touch up my work when and where people notice it. It not only improves my work but also improves reader's ability to follow my story better. Thank you for your honest feedback. I hope you stop by later in the future to re-review my work. You have been very helpful!
Envision:I love to see creative criticism like this. It allows me to touch up my work when and where people notice it. It not only improves my work but also improves reader's ability to follow my story better. Thank you for your honest feedback. I hope you stop by later in the future to re-review my work. You have been very helpful!