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I will be honest, there are few edits and finishing touches that has to be done. You have potential and I know you will still grow along the way. Read more about metaphoric and poetic narrations and you will get some insight about them. Study about sentence flow and sentence sequence. There are many guides on internet. All in all, a very promising work! I gotta say I'm inpressed! With talented author, this novel was in good hands!
The author needs to watch out for grammatical errors because there are a number of such errors throughout the story. I personally stumbled over the different characters and mixed them up with each other, but the story plot seems sound so far otherwise, and being based on historical facts, the setting of the story seems pretty good as well. Highly suggested for historical fiction fans!
This story has an interesting start. I found the names and title unique which is a great plus since this adds to my addition words. Now for review proper, Writing quality: well there are some g-errors but it didn't much hinder you from reading. Stability of Updates. Well I know for a story to liven up, you need every time to write each chapter. So just take your time. Though I look forward to see this one grow more chaps. Story Development: The opening was great. A conflict among those who is on power already set the mood for the story. The war of warlords seems interesting too. Character Design: The characters were detailed and absolutely alive. I find the princess personality likable too. The dialogues between characters are smooth too. World Background. Greatly written. Overall this book is a great read already and addition to my collections. I look forward for more updates. Keep it up Author!
This book has a really smooth opening. Only two chapters posted so far but the quality was very good. Love the idea of a world in chaos and varies factions fighting for control. Certainly a good setting for an epic novel. The characters so far seem colorful and well-written, which will certainly help this story going forward. I like what I'm seeing. I'm sure the high quality will continue.