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Some typos need to be cleansed from the novel. I also suggest using (" or ') quotations marks to replace the – and * because it is not proper. Some readers will see it as itchy in their eyes. The grammar seemed good though Kudos! I like the story but it failed me to get hooked in the first chap. Maybe it was not for me. Don't take it as a personal attack but a critical objective review 😭 I hate to be critical though most of the time but it was what I think you needed the most. Well, good luck!
Let me preface this with an apology. I have no experience reading horror novels and what I'm presenting here is merely a layperson's opinion of this book, not a comprehensive critic that takes into account the minutiae of this niche genre. But as far as I know, horror novels are hard to write well, and that is something that the author should be commended for, especially when it has been done well. The story so far has been a smooth and enjoyable read, as the author demonstrates good grammar and writing structure, formatting and such. Horror books are not my cup of tea but it's a good novel. The plot is compelling and there is enough content already published to spend quite some time reading it. Keep up the good work, author! Have a great day, author, and everyone :)