Gaasuja
The initial chapters are crafted with expertise showing MC's ability to think carefully and smart, as he choses the other option instead of usual baby phase to be reborn. The pace is moderate and grammar is decent, talking about the theme/genre I seriously think author knows what they are doing with it! Good luck with WSA! [~aysel]
Been reading up to 8 chaps now. Quite a cool plot you got here. I like how you stick to your character designs. Raymund only think of this as entertainment and nothing more. He's pretty laidback, not strictly driven to win the entire thing, definitely more concern about his chosen hero's 'performance', if you catch my drift. I don't particularly like him for the demeaning actions he dished to Elise, but it match with his background and current state of mind, I'll give you that. And what I like about Elise is her believable, logical reaction to the happenings around. She wasn't an avid WN reader or RPG lovers who expect a reincarnation and casual 'you are the chosen one' situation. Hence why the need to scream and run as her initial instinct. Kudos to you. Hopefully, you don't rush things and keep th character developments to happen slow. Keep up the good works, author :D
I admittedly didn't get far. Mc just sort made me sick. Like people can enjoy villains but despise jerks. in the first ten chapters I just wanted him to lose. Only he'd not be the one to suffer for it. Mc pick up and draft young woman who's family burnt to death alive as his play peice and proceeds to be the most unthoughtful, sexist guilt tripping obnoxious condemnation of religion I can scarce imagine. He is on every level and idiot and terrible as a person and player about Elise and deeply unfunny. Team Rocket treats Pokemon better than he does Elise.
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4 chapter in, and I see sign of ntr Author intentionally create a lucky pervert moment between a potential harem member with a random guy, and the MC just treat everyone as an NPC, so he doesn't even bother about it. The guy while trying to save the girl, somehow undress her pant, and panties, got to see it all in full glory, and the MC who act like a system of the girl just laugh. This plot is completely unnecessary and to me, it a sign of the girl not gonna be in the mc harem. It feel wrong, since in the synopsis give the impression that, the mc will build a harem, base on the girl that he reincarnated. This is just 4 chapter in, so I won't consider it as much of a spoiler, just want to ask, if my gut is correct on this one?
Un comienzo dulce con un final agrio, osea que mamada termino como el principe de Persia y las arenas del tiempo y otras pelis, o angel beats literal se devuelve al apartamento despuΓ©s de esa casualidad y ve a alguien parecido a su primer servant y dice soy tu nueva vecina y fin. Yo esperando que fuera como algunos Protas chinos que se quedan en el poder de controlar su destino. Pero solo eso, jamΓ‘s vuelvo a leer algo de realidad virtual al fin al cabo siempre serΓ‘ falso u.u
Lorem Ipsum errr, I don't remember the rest so let's move on. The story paints a vivid picture of the world where the action takes place. Through the usage of the tiny elements of the world, the author instantly immerses the reader into the rich in flavour world of his creation. I really hate speaking about the plot as I believe everyone should try it themselves. Despite that, solidly written cliches and relatively standard openings allows me to peer into what possibly this novel have in store. Execution of the further plot is what I'm actually curious about, as I have a feeling that it will exceed my expectations on this one. In the end, I cannot really say much about the story. It's a solid piece of the literature that promises a tasty piece of webnovel down the line. Now it's up to author to live up to the promises his chapters give.
Good job author, you improved chap after another, great story with amazing writing style, i loved the mc and your descriptions. The plot was well written and your knowledge made great touch to the chapters keep up the good work also guys u must read it because this author is very disciplined and always delivers
I HIGHLY RECOMMEND THIS NOVEL TO YOU ALL. I just read one chapter and it's good . Better than mine .. This novel is fresh with a new concept if the author didn't mess up than it can also come in top 25. No kidding. Everyone should read it. Keep going author. You can do it. I believe in you. Don't Give up. You can do it...