Inspired from a lot of people.
They're swapped reviews and fake stars, though I wonder why would one create such image if themselves when they've no intention of improving!?
Missing dialogue here, I guess?
Such realistic depiction!
15 being marriage-able age doesn't mean the kids were adults, that too a century or so ago.
On cloud nine*
[Reviewed on: 15-06-2021] *Glimpse of initial chapters.* GOOD POINTS: - Likeable MC - Not extremely poverty stricken, MC has some saving and stuff to support himself - Weak to strong trope is executed well - MC can think, he observes and doesn't go round being bullied physically (verbally, yes) - You don't have to cringe because MC is dumb, because he isn't - Expect beasts, Qi cultivation, maybe realms too, and lots of action - Some realistic elements are also depicted because we spot corruption, injustice, torture, bullying, conspiracies too WEAKNESS: - The narration style is highly 'telling' rather than 'showing' - Author's omnipresent tone is everywhere, which gave lesser screen and insights to the character - Readable novel, though there are tense fluctuations - Some information is repeated, such as chapter 2 and 3 has repeated info about Meng Yan.
[Reviewed on: 15-06-2021] Okay! - Never put emotes in novels, ffs it is prose writing! - The sentence structures are not readable - Poorly written, dialogues and descriptions are merged - The speaker's voice is fused with the description, that it's hard to track whether it's a dialogue or soliloquy - I couldn't go past the initial half of the 1st chapter - Author needs to edit from the scratch!
You know too much, duh! Stalker alert?
Earlier you said he was an adult at 15, duh!?
Duh? He was a child and of course helpless, how could he even save his parents? This is absurd.
15 and adult, you serious?
Haha, you bish! xDD
I hate this brat
[Reviewed on: 12-06-2021] GOOD POINTS: - Comical vibe through the chara of female demon/devil - MC is reasonably smart, not too dumb to cringe at all - The flow and pace is fine too - Apparently there are no issues in grammar [will explain further below] - Storyline somewhat resembles 'my pick up artist system' but no it's not a fanfic - MC has a goal to achieve or he will die - At first it gave me 'death note' vibe, then the devil felt a succubus to me as she emerged - It was entertaining~ WEAKNESS: - Synopsis doesn't really tells what's inside, it should be more elaborative on the contract aspect - The initiative strategy in chapter 1 is extremely wrong - No one wants to read the routine of MC, his house, work, what he is wearing, food, etc - The narration is in personal/1st person but the repetition of 'I' is annoying, in about five lines 'i' is overly used seven times! - 1st chapter should have begun by the later half, the upper half is completely dump in my opinion. Since 2 and 3rd chapters are without fillers and absolutely good with hooks, while 1st [initial half] is a turn off. - Devil can read his mind but at places she doesn't respond to his thoughts, why?
He can barely walk due to his broken legs, how can he dig a hole? >.>
You are lucky*