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Nice story but kinda dull sometimes Just that make longer chapers and more DIALOGUES and INTERACTIONS with The Harem and other people on [1st person perspective] making it more lively and Lessen the timeskip it make the story unrealistic and hard to follow I'm even surprised he's already 17. You also need to put small details Like: The date like if it's Monday or is on Sunday or what time of the day he is in like is it morning?,night?,etcetc. Small details like that make the story more Realistic and add a little bit of Slice Of Life in it spend time with his ladies like he's having dialogues and interact with them on [1st Person perspective] and not just explaining things on [3rd person perspective] because it makes that part of the story dull and forgettable
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It's a decent story overall. Could've been better but it's not shit either. The mc started off as a wimp but grew a spine later. Though in many places the plot feels too rushed. Also the romantic part is unrealistic as hell. The mc isn't shown to be manipulative enough to make a harem without substantial use of mind magic.
look at your book is great, the plot is interesting, the planning of each step is good to see. And (super) living life the way you want it, and not the way people want it is good (without that of worrying about the moral compass of people in general). I like a character like that, just like yours (super). and the launch rate is even better (which sometimes makes me afraid of ending).
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