Geokit
It's alright. Writing quality isnt the best, but it's readable. The author writes like he's simply writing a short dairy on the events. Like "so and so said this, so and so said that, so and so said this again, so and so said that". There's not really many descriptions on things like the surroundings, so it'll be best if you have prior knowledge on the worlds used in this fanfic. Otherwise, it's good, I suggest giving it a read.
Obligatory Author 5 Star rating, Also a quick warning for everyone. This is not being update on this plat form, theres a discord code in the latest chapter that you can use to join my discord and find links to the Wattpad version that will be updated. Hopefully I'll be able to get this onto FF . net and you can read it there as well.
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Dear Author, I personally do not mind the story too much and find it rather humorous but I wish for you to change the title as something like โas primate murder I shall guide protagonistsโ or something. I was looking for an op protaganist demolishing worlds or fixing dumb plots not this. Donโt get me wrong the story is fun enough and Iโll still read it when I have time but the title and description gives a differentโฆ vibe than what the story portrays
I really wanted this story to be good, since I love the premise of the MC having Fou's body, unfortunately it just isn't.Most of the 'story' is just filled with status screens, item/skill descriptions and info-dumps, that are completely unnecessary for any fan of the Fate series.The actual story is filled with some of the most cringe fanfiction topes (like a comically evil Dumbledore and Weasley family), that most people are long since sick of.
This is one of the best if not the best FanFiction on Harry Potter worlds were there is a female Harry that Iโve read to this date. The update speed is quite slow but it is better than a lot of novels that Iโve read before, there is some grammatical errors here and there but not common the world background or info dump needs to be heavily reworked, since in most cases he says a brief description of said power then sends you to a wiki for more info just give a short and concise answer. And there is some numbers that need to be fixed in the old chapters getting switched around and such you could go back and edit a chapter or two most comments are people taking note of incorrections though out the book but all in all itโs in the top 3 Harry Potter books Iโve read that has less that 50 chapters canโt wait for more you have more talent for writing than I think you give yourself credit for๐
[Plot-line] [The Void: A twelveโyearโold Shirล wakes up in a void with knowledge slowly engraving itself into his soul.] [First Steps: An innumerable amount of time has past since Shirล has awakened within the void and he has gained a greater understanding of existence.] [Origin: Shirล begins to understand more about his soul and what his origin is.] [Skills: Shirล learns to crystallize his wisdom into {Skills}. Shirล creates {Sage} to boost his thoughts, and {Archivist} to sort information.] [Magic: Shirล realizes his Soul is drawing in Void energy passively, and begins to experiment with it resulting in {Magic Eater} and {Magic Core}.] [A Craftsmenโs Tools: Shirล delves into his growing knowledge concerning creation with the use of {Sage} and {Archivist} with the outcome being {Creation} to help streamline the process of making {Skills}, and {Destruction} to remove redundancies and possible imperfections.] [Understanding: Shirล begins to understand the limits of his {Skills}. Shirล uses {Creation} and {Sage} to break his {Skills} limits. Some time has passed and Shirล begins to understand the concept of evolution from his growing wisdom. Shirล uses {Magic Eater} with {Creation} to make {Evolution} to make his {Skills} evolve.] [Great Sage: Shirล uses {Evolution} on {Sage} resulting in {Great Sage}. {Great Sage} Suggest integrating {Skills} into one another to improve performance, Shirล agrees. {Great Sage} integrates {Archivist} into itโs self to improve processing and memory capacity, and uses {Creation} to make {Deviant} to increase {Skill} efficiency.] [Emotions: Shirล begins to refer to {Great Sage} with female pronouns. {Great Sage} begins to study her masters ever growing knowledge with {Archivist}. {Great Sage} uses {Evolution} to grant itself the ability to experience emotions to better assist her master. {Great Sage} Uses {Evolution}, {Creation} and {Destruction} on {Magic Eater} resulting in {Void Eater}.] [Rapheal: {Great Sage} uses {Void Eater} to provide energy to {Evolution}. {Great Sage} request permission to use {Evolution} on itself, Shirล approves. {Great Sage} uses {Evolution} on itself, resulting in {Wisdom King: Raphael}.] [Akashic Records: {Wisdom King: Raphael} request permission to evolve the rest of Shirลโs {Skills}, Shirล allows it. {Void Eater} evolved into {Void God: Azatoroth}. {Magic Core} evolved into {Magicule Breeder Reactor}. {Archivist} evolved into {Information King: Akashic Records}.] [Athena: {Wisdom King: Raphael} pauseโs {Skill} evolution to inform Shirล of {Information King: Akashic Records}. Shirล suggest to integrate {Information King: Akashic Records} into {Wisdom King: Raphael} to enhance performance. {Wisdom King: Raphael} uses {Deviant} on {Information King: Akashic Records} to fuse it into itself, but with no results. {Wisdom King: Raphael} attempt again using {Evolution} and {Deviant} on both {Magicule Breeder Reactor} and {Information King: Akashic Records} resulting in {Goddess of Wisdom: Athena}.] [Naming: {Goddess of Wisdom: Athena} informs her master of her successful evolution. Shirล is surprised by the amount of emotion in his long time companions voice. {Goddess of Wisdom: Athena} informs him that it was the result of both the evolution and his desire for companionship causing her to gain a stronger sense of self. Shirล ask her if he should simply refer to her as Athena now, but is instead requested to provide her with a name to improve her abilities. Shirล ask how a name would improve her abilities, with {Goddess of Wisdom: Athena} then explaining the power of names. Shirล now understanding the significant of names, begins to go through the knowledge of legendโs that {Goddess of Wisdom: Athena} provided him, and decide to name her {Medusa}. After being named {Goddess of Wisdom: Athena} evolved past a {Skill} and became {Codex: Medusa}. {Medusa} greets her master and swears her eternal love and loyalty to him.] [Evolution: Having been a innumerable amount of time since {Medusaโs} naming, Shirล has begun to question if he can leave this void, to which {Medusa} says thatโs the only way to leave would be to evolve himself. Shirล ask how, to which {Medusa} states that he would have to evolve and assimilate all of his {Skills} into one.] [Next Step: Shirล request {Medusa} to begin, {Medusa} complies. {Evolution} evolves into {King of Evolution: Darwin}. {Creation} evolves into {Creation God: Brahma}. {Destruction} evolves into {Destruction God: Shiva}. {Medusa} having finished her task, began the final steps to her masters freedom.] [Voice of The World: {Medusa} begins fusing all of Shirลโs {Skills} resulting in the creation of the {Voice of The World}. Shirล begins his evolution. The evolution causeโs the void to start to condense around him.] [BigโBang: Shirล is beginning to reach the final stage of his evolution. Shirล evolves into the {Voice of The World} resulting in the void to implode onto itself. The resulting explosion resulted with the creation of the multiverse.] [New Role: Shirล gets used to the idea of being God. {Medusa} gives him a pep talk. Shirล startโs to study the {Akashic Records} to create a planet.] [Cardinal World: Shirล uses {Voice of The World} to create his first solar system. Shirล creates the Cardinal World as his base of operations.] [Earth: Shirล has {Medusa} find a version of Earth similar to his old one. {Medusa} finds one but is concerned about the traits this Earth has. {Medusa} informs Shirล that she found one. Shirล goes to Earth(DxD).] [Kyoto: Shirล appears outside of Kyoto, Japan. He has {Medusa} create a identity for him to use. Shirล meets kunou who is distressed about her motherโs disappearance.] [Yasaka: Shirล saves Yasaka from the hero faction. Yasaka ask if he is a God? Shirล explains that he can be considered one, but is much more then a God.] [Time Goes On: Shirล has lived in Kyoto for over a years. Shirล and Yasaka have been growing closer as time goes on. {Medusa} is worried that Yasaka is stealing her master.]
I'm not really verse in HP and Fate, but here's my perspective; It's an awesome story with a good not fast nor slow development, comedy is only so-so it can make you smile but that's only it explanation are pretty good but please refrain from adding a lot of (),#,{} and [] since it's kinda distracting not gonna lie, but overall it's a good story to read. Definitely recommend it. Here's my review[img=recommend]
The novel itself is pretty good, I like the flow of the story. The only problem I have is, The character development of the summoned heroes. Example Merlin and the anime and the mango. It was more expressive and much more annoying. The West was the same. Ignoring that detail the West was pretty good.